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- ********0
I like the top 3".
- maddman0
Too much gimmicky design. Gradients, watermarking, shadows. Looks like a supplied template from word. What is the target here? Looks like a retirement home site. Maybe a Bank of America knock off. Is this your first concept? Too many repeat elements and no true hierarchy. Its hard to critique if you dont really know what the scope is. These are just some of my first reactions.
- Redritect0
The lettering in the banner doesn't pop enough and there needs to be some horizontal flow besides the words, maybe an underline or something of the like.
The stripes in the botom three butons look kinda like coca-cola waves. Make Icons for the bottom three buttons that resemble the styling of the symbol at the top while incorporating the subject of the link into the icon.
- kinobe0
concept it alright - thats it - just alright
u havent given me any indication thats its to do with outdoor pursuits
and the colours your have used are abit boring.- please type 'you' instead of u, makes your advice seem worth taking!Mojo
- lol
Barry_Grant
- PSYKHO0
Mojo, I think the sites not bad, here's what I would change:
1) The header is nice so leave that or tweak it a bit (maybe change the background color a bit) but I would get rid of the center image of the guy jumping and replace that with a real image of a person jumping or something? Just looks wrong with two images of people jumping.
2) Is the navigation going to change for the sub pages or will there always be a large image area then the navigation on the left of that image? Not sure if you want to add the navigation on the top?
3) The 3 content area under the main image are just floating and they don't really do it for me, if you add some image to that then that could work better then they do now.
- 23kon0
so the main area in the middle is where all the content will appear?
and this area is in flash?search engines wont be able to read the content
- moamoa0
tooo much 2.0, reduce it.
this is maybe I god example for you, just apiece of 2.0
- i can feel a rip coming onkinobe
- fuck you, I don't rip.Mojo
- just a piece of 2.0 hahahablackspade
- Hate the SwissCom logo, looks like a vaginaPSYKHO
- Mojo0
Guys, thanks for the advice.
The reality is, that this is a real-world, low-budget, low-profile job. So to my client, it's better than anything they'd get nearby.
And while having 20 designers crit a piece is fantastic - the result of too many cooks is commonly a mass of shite. I'm not a super designer. This isn't paying that well. I'll take most of your advice, and show you what I come up with later. I don't think I made it clear that this was an initial visual style mockup lacking real content.
Thanks again.
- ********0
I like the design and layout, but for some reason it reminds me of British Airways
- Mojo0
- Still no content from client though! Doing layouts without content is horrible.Mojo
- Figures no content from the client, fuck them all...********
- that curvy thing in the header is almost like the beginning of something graphical. that red curvy mark is your viisual question that you must answer.********
- chossy0
much better, I would say two things though, request a call back needs its box more defined because the red swoosh looks weird without a more defined box restraining it. Also I think it may look nicer if you put a rounded box around the navigation links below the big main flash content box, but only have the box rounded on the bottom so it joins the rounded box at the top as if it is an extension of the above box....
- Barry_Grant0
At the end of the day - none of the advice here can be taken seriously - the cunts on here are all wana be designers - otherwise they would be working on shit now and not spending hours on end on this site dishing ill informed opinions.
Have confidence in your self and what you do - thats all you need.
- Or they may have a day off, and help out considerabley when it comes to TV and motion design problems.chossy
- If you're spending a day off on this site you need to get a life mate!Barry_Grant
- I have been on here to and fro for about hour, I am also doing the dishes and some house tidyingchossy
- Later on I plan on buying some nice food, and going for a jog. In addition to this I amchossy
- rendering something out for a freelance client. Shouldn't you be away stealing lead from roofs or something?.chossy
- Well you'll be OK, Your bedsit is on the ground floor so you wont feel the effects.Barry_Grant
- haha! I love you all.Mojo
- ********0
ahhh, yet another twat with a big mouth that needs to hide behind an alias before he has anything to say.
we were running short of them.
- pal, believe me if I were you and had you're portfolio - I'd want to remain autonomousBarry_Grant
- you would wish to abide by your own laws?********
- His autonomous laws as well.chossy
- moamoa0
Barry_Grant
..... you are such a brain
- hmm....maybe the german - english translation is'nt coming across to well. makes you sound stupid.Barry_Grant
- 'too'********
- grammer naziBarry_Grant
- haha, just if you're going to have a go at someones translation into english, you should get your own correct.********
- thanks for the advice on english - you potato eating leprechaun numptyBarry_Grant
- i'm scottish you tit. not very good at this are you.********
- Dancer0
hahaha
the bloke come on for a crit gets some (emphasis on some) constructive feedback. Makes some changes. returns with a far better design and Barry then says it's a waste of time...Go Barry go...
- detritus0
Barry = dust_ = kinobe = bitter troll, I reckon.
Sorry for filling your thread with vapid rubbish, Mojo.
- nah, english is better. still pretty poor though.********
- "wana", "you're", "is'nt", "autonomous". Same demi- dyslexic muppetry, I think.detritus
- -tardBarry_Grant
- Automaton.detritus
- yeah, the more he types the more i think you might be correct.********
- nah, english is better. still pretty poor though.
- ********0
Mojo, it is coming along nicely:)
- Barry_Grant0
Heres 1 thing I reckon - detritus=unemployed
- Sadly, wrong.detritus
- Sadly? Unfortunate maybe....Barry_Grant
- 'Unfortunate wrong'?
Makes sense this does not?detritus - "Unfortunate wrong"? who said that...sssshhhhhhhh go awayBarry_Grant
- I was here first, you nonsensical twerp.detritus
- Hay.....its ok ...to cry....let it all out ....come on......Barry_Grant
- Mojo0
Haha, wow! Thanks for the comments. I don't mind the random garbage, actually makes it more entertaining.
And, actually, I think getting critique and feedback from other people very valuable. I don't think it means your a shit designer - I actually think you're a shit designer if you don't ask for help. A proud one too.
Anyway, it's coming on. I'm getting some content now (sometimes it's like squeezing blood from a stone, but we get there).
I realised that my screen shows more detail than others - like some of the lighter elements just appear white on other screens. Need to calibrate.
What seems weak now is the bits on the left, but we'll get there.
Thanks again chums..