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- Helvetica
Doing an illustration for a business event. Concept is ideas are bricks building a structure. OK no golden pencil for that but it's what I'm working with! This is the ticket shape and I don't know if the illustration is working, but I do think it has good potential, any suggestions for the layout, or anywhere for that matter? I have a triathlon on saturday and I can't concentrate!
The ticket: http://cl.ly/1jm2
The illustration: http://cl.ly/1kJl
playing with perspective in CS5: http://cl.ly/1kMbtx
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- monospaced0
what he said
- stoplying0
What about wrapping the text on different sides of the bricks?
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- Samush0
is this a case of using some software features only because they're new?
- hellojeehae0
i would change the typeface.
- detritus0
I'd sack off the in-program perspective, go get an a3 pad and draw the brick structure by hand. This'll allow you to divorce yourself from the tools and put a bit more character into the overall form. Everything's so straight and unnatural - even the choice of positioning of the bricks feels 'stratified random' with no concession to its impact or how it should feel.
- Helvetica0
Thanks detritus for some useful feedback, glad to know not everyone on here is just a ffffound fanboy or a plain dick. Newstoday used to be friendly! Oh well.
- what's ffffound?monospaced
- Hey, Helv - I didn't notice it was you 'til you responded here - NT/QBN's the same as it ever was. More dicks, mind.detritus
- it was never friendly, always been cuntsPIZZA
- miesvan0
Dizzy me. The bricks are building a structure like a toy. Or as Star Wars. The concept of structure built of glass, not very successful ... The font has nothing to do with the language of the illustrations ...
- Amicus0
Bricks don't build a structure.
Humans build a structure with bricks. If the design looks like it'll fall over any second you haven't really implemented your concept, have you? Give it a solid foundation and work up from there.
- detritus0
They were there. You're just late to the party, i_monk.
- maikel0
if you want to use 3d, please use a real 3d software (and be good at it). sketching things up first is always good as i really doubt a 3d thingy for illustrator will help you.
also the type and the bricks are not getting along that well.
i believe that's what the others meant, in a more pedantic way of course.
- utopian0
fantastic!
- acrossthesea0
I agree with the others are saying... sketch this out and create a rough dynamic layout of intersecting shapes. Then recreate it in illustrator. I recommend NOT adding perspective. I'd approach this treating isometrically (think pixel art style).
Isometric style:
