Biz card crit
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- ********0
thanks for the advice dudes! :D
- Scotch_Roman0
What Mau said. Your logotype is too large. Kill the eyeballs, they're lame and just plain weird. Get rid of your disciplines list. If you feel that you must include your URL, put it on the logotype side.
This is a business card, not a brochure. Simplify.
On the subject, your logotype needs kerning help. Close up VI a bit, and a little more for UA. Also, if you're going to use something as ubiquitous for the logotype, then modify it in some way to set yourself apart.
Regarding your title, I frankly think that Creative Director is a bit of a stretch for a 23 yr old kid. I seriously doubt you have the experience and knowledge required to pull of the work of a good CD. Nothing personal, I just think it's good practice to accurately depict ones capabilites when it comes to titles.
- *"...something as ubiquitous as Gotham for the logotype..."Scotch_Roman
- zenmasterfoo0
Try playing with the space you have. You're too married to the eyeball graphics and they're making this hard to appreciate. All black as partidge suggested above is classic. I suggest you start with a new perspective.
- ********0
sweet thanks scotch
- vaxorcist0
If you offer Development and Photography services, I'd segment those businesses and do totally different business cards for them... some clients may want "a specialist" rather than "somebody who tries to do everything"
- d_rek0
quick thoughts:
-eyeballs take away from the strong type maybe make them a monotone or part of the bg element... or scaled way way back...
-little kerning goes a long way
-Gotham is a nice font, don't get me wrong... but it's really saturated the design market right now... maybe try a font that has a little more character?
- noRBG0
i would say kill the color, and stick to B&W, even if that means getting rid of the eyeballs in the end.
- move0
I actually like the concept alot. Sure the eyeballs are abstract, but since when does abstract have to be bad? zenmasterfoo gave you a good start. I would only suggest making the name and title a wee bit smaller, printing the card on a nice coated stock and you should be good to go. Slap it high!!!
- Typosapien0
Handshakes are a great metaphor for business cards. What kind of a handshake would yours be?
- Scotch_Roman0
Get rid of the + before your phone number. For better spacing, I recommend periods between number sets or simple letterspaces (but track those spaces in a bit if you do so).
This is a finishing element, but kern everything before you call it finished—not just your logotype.
- tparsons0
Hire a designer to do it for you. Seriously!
- Scotch_Roman0
Bad advice on the paper stock move. Nothing says "I printed these through some cheap-ass online vendor" like coated paper for a business card. Use a #1 uncoated, at least 100lb, preferably in the 120lb range. Give it some snap. I used Pegasus midnight black for my cards, they're 130lb with a nice weight in the hand.
- pango0
i have to say. day time QBNers are much more helpful. and constructive.
- we are the ones with jobs. :)baseline_shift
- true.coco_ono
- coco_ono0
I still don't get the eyeballs.
- ********0
less is more!
- Knuckleberry0
Lose the gradients please.
- its_only_me0
Your card suggests that youre trying to be jack of all trades.
Focus on one thing, and put that on your card.
- tOki0
For all of you dissing his age. I'm CD @ 22yrs old.
Don't be shitty because we started young :P
- gentleman0
so you're a creative director in a company of one?