site crit please
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- leftwave
i'm designing a new site for a health & wellness company in san diego.
http://leftwave.com/indevelopmen…
i welcome your feedback!
- pixar_fan_one0
i like your colors and the design is nice and clean. my only comment is that i would watch the size. right now you dont fit into 1024x768 screen. otherwise great job my friend. would like to see more in future.
- bolus0
i like it,
two things, (1) it feels as if there is just a bit too much space at the top, both the blue background and the white above "thrive wellness"
(2) this is probably my mind fucking with me, but find the reflection of the running man way to strong, is it (partly) photoshopped?
other than that, nice work :)
- pixar_fan_one0
hmmm good point bolus i think reflection is too strong too. make it looks like his legs are running free from his body. maybe lower opacity of these.
- Nairn0
great work, leftwave - i can't believe how much the quality of work has improved in only the past year!
i'd be interested to see one of your content pages - index looks fine enough, if a little spacey at the top. also, the logo's a bit funny - the positioning isn't quite on (both internally and in reference to the page) and it sits a bit flat.
- leftwave0
thanks for your feedback everyone. actually, i didn't photoshop that guys legs AT ALL. the image just looks like that. it sounds like maybe i should photoshop it?
nairn, thanks for the kind words. specifically, what can i do to improve the logo position??
- bolus0
just curious, where did you get the image?
- leftwave0
istock! (my client is a cheapo)
- Nairn0
for a start, tie it up with the telephone number at right - there's already a physical pixel difference, but beyond that, visually, the logo looks heavier and lower down. Otherwise, I'd loosen the logo's tie to your grid - shiggle the flower motif right a few pixels (or left, and its increase size), make it stand out more, but flow it into the rounded corner of your main image. Imo, non-squared graphic elements work better when they sit loosely alongside defined gridded elements - text, main images etc.
dunno if that's clear. basically, play with it a little - either regiment it or let it loose.
- Nairn0
imo, the motif should be bigger, smaller or the same size (height) as your logo text. at the moment, it's only-just slightly bigger than your text, which leaves it feeling half-done,
that said, i'm just an opinionated sod who should really just concentrate on his own thing.
- jox0
Beautiful work!
- MrD0
i like it
pretty
cute
- johndiggity0
the white box is kind of clumsy. maybe rounded corners? tie it in with the other elements and the subject?
- Nairn0
imo, yes. though i'd tighten up the distance between motif and text.
better get someone else's opinion though, i shouldn't be regarded as an authority!
- leftwave0
great suggestion. that looks way better. the embarassing part now is that i designed the logo!
you are the authority! thanks :)
- ********0
your bottom border should be larger than your top one. at the moment it is the other way around. but it's looking realy nice. good job.
oh, and your english is better again i see pixar, good job on that too.
- ********0
ok so.. honestly... it does the job..but
1) logo...mmmm dunno
2)the links at the bottom are too close to the copyright info
3) not keen on the italics...
have you thought of making a 'tag' instead?
i used to make them for nixon and studio fei.. just like a little clothes tag http://www.falmouthoysterfestiva…
4) also ahave you thought of center aligning the bottm links? rather than range them left?4
- AndyRoss0
It's handsome. Looks like the sort of thing that people who exercise would like.
My beef is that I can hardly see the ampersand in white against the sky. It's so faint!
Maybe add some density to it, or a little color? Or leave it alone and tell me to drop dead?
- smltom0
So nice to see a crit request with positive and constructive responses. It's a kind night!
- jaylarson0
leftwave,
you have a good thing going here, but i do have some critiques.lose some of the top margin, i don't like to scroll.
second, there are too many typefaces on the page. i count five. limited this to two, three at the absolute most, that is including the logo.
third, i also agree, lose the italic down under.
but another note, the color palatte is organized and subtle. try to tighten up the type a bit.after this, lets see it in action. i like the transparency of the reflection. that too i would like to see in action!
good luck.