Made a Short film, Let me know what you think??
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- moldero0
nice work, the VO selection makes it sound like a commercial though, im still waiting for the pitch.
- blessed0
A short film based in London illustrating the cause and effect of yesterday.
Monday The start of the week and nobody knows what the week is going to bring.
- blessed0
We are all the star of our own film / commercial.
“The consequences of today are determined by the actions of the past. To change your future, alter your decisions today.”
- blessed0
5d!!! if that is the question.. lol
- anthonyzinonos0
voice over would of been better in british accent, its u.k based so why have an american voice over?
thats my only criticism, really enjoyed it :)
- SrSamaurai0
good overall but the payoff was a little weak or non-existent however.
- blessed0
@anthonyzinonos
Fair point!! I thought of that, but the question is why not? There is no rules that say you cant. and would it have the same effect with an english narrator?
- blessed0
@SrSamaurai
I thought because it was 3 minutes long I didnt want to take the viewer all over the shop! and confuse things, So I left the ending quite open.
But that point is truly taken for my next short! Thanks!!
- akrok0
not bad, m.
- VikingKingEleven0
the voice makes it sound like a trailer
- blessed0
@VikingKingEleven is that a bad thing?
- It seems to hard for the story. Overall it was very nice.VikingKingEleven
- Thanks!!!blessed
- monoblanco0
Very clever.
Good work sir!
- missus_dita0
I know the feeling!!!
- blessed0
@monoblanco Thanks alot most appreciated.
- blessed0
@missus_dita I am glad you can relate.
- blessed0
Anymore comments?
Is it me or is QBN silent today??
- Tausk0
The opening scene was exciting but the explanation of the cause is rather bland.
Predictable. In story. Disconnect is rather evident. Too much explanation in second half with the first half. It doesn't loop back with the first portion at the end.
Camera wise, too much dof action. Using dof to cause the feel of hurry or party has too much of a similar tone. Flashback has the same feel to it.
