Paranoia
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- benfal99
I just finished this animation for a school project! Any comments are welcome :D
- e-pill0
is the girl in the red coat supposed to be Scarlett Johansson?
- ********0
I like the textures and illustration style - kind of reminds me of salad fingers. Music is great. I especially liked the scene with all the eyeballs - very effective.
I was a bit confused by the story though. Not sure what the enterprise building is, was it a generic office or somewhere particular? As I understood it, a delivery guy has a mental breakdown - which the building's security guy preempts, by enlisting the help of a psychiatrist. However, when the psychiatrist arrives, the delivery guy is shocked and kills him with a golf club.
- benfal990
@lukus
thanks for the comments!
I know the story isn't perfect. The delivery guy is in fact a financial advisor suffering of paranoia. The security guard has a note on the wall saying that they need to look for him since he's been behaviing weird at work. That day, the security guard thought that the employee was too weird and decided to call help. THen, he flips up and kill him and himself afterward.its not a golf club, its a shotgun.
- < that was badly written. sorry. i havent sleep much last night. i was working on this thing.benfal99
- ********0
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Well, I think you've got a good thing going on - I like the animation, all the elements have come together nicely - will look forward to seeing the next one.Maybe next time you need to spent more time on crafting (& then telling) the story. Remember that yr audience has no idea about the back story.. they only know what you tell them, and they're dependent on you for all clues.
I don't know if you do this already, but I think it's important to storyboard like crazy. You only need really rough sketches most of the time. It can be good to use post-it notes - because you can easily rearrange a sequence and add or remove shots. Ask people to look over your rough storyboards to make sure they understand the flow of the narrative. I reckon it can also be useful to scan in a storyboard and produce a rough animatic with approximate shot timings - that way you can get a sense of how it's working before animating.
- benfal990
^ yeah totally lukus! I did all this at school. But in the end, with the lack of time i had to put on it, i cutted some parts and my script and storyline got kinda messed up. Iam really conscious about it.
thanks for the comments :D