Logo Crit, Brandi G
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- MHDC
New identity work for photographer Brandi Grooms, she specializes in boudoir photography.
This is my first pass...
any and all input is welcome and appreciated.I haven't shown her anything yet, figured I would put it through it's paces here first.
- detritus0
if it's to be set inside that big pink circle, you're going to lose the detail in the boobs. Either take out the circle, or take out the detail.
- scrameone0
At a small size, the illustration in the o's will not hold up.
- detritus0
why not take out the bra, and make the pink circle nipple-like?
- utopian0
Reminds me of skt's logo, just sayin.
- 7point340
also, it looks a bit off center. i think the ™ is skewing it a bit to the left, but maybe that's just me
- kona0
damn you for making me google 'boudoir'.
that is all.
- MHDC0
Ha! Damn, this whole transgender thing is throwing me off now
- TINKLDN0
that will not print well at small sizes.
also, i think you could think about your type choice a little more. archer is a little dry. something a little more sensual. and i would, personally, lose the gimmick.
- zenmasterfoo0
try to simplify it. maybe a beautifully stylized brassiere with the "brandi grooms photography" reduced in size and as the logo type.
2 cents more.
- hellrod0
Your bra curves should arch the other way. High on the outside and low in the middle and curve upwards in the center point. The detail will definitely get lost if it sits in a circle. Also, try making the word photographer smaller and maybe a stronger weight but keep it spread out as is. I don't really understand the trademark on a photographer's name.
- Good notes, I'll make some edits... see where it standsMHDC
- akrokdesign0
no need for ™, as is isn't a ™.
the type is too thin, make it small (the logo) and see if its works.
what a hell is going on in the "O's", drop that idea. not good.if you want more personal, make her write her name.
- Ruffian0
The bra looks too childish a la pedo look and in small sizes I doubt it would work.
- bigbaby530
What if, instead of boobs, you use a keyhole as the mark like on an old fashioned door...just a thought.
- bigbaby530
I say "keyhole" as if the viewer was looking/spying on whats going on behind the door.
- doesnotexist0
try again
- dirtydesign0
looks like its trying to sell bras
- MHDC0
Yeah, I'm getting a "do it over" vibe. I did make some edits, notes taken from Hellrod helped. I simplified it and cleaned it up a bit. Did a test print and it seems to hold detail nicely.
As a background to this mark, Brandi does other work (portraits, weddings, ect.) Same circle only gray and Archer Type is used without any additions. It's very clean. This was just a slightly embellished version, to the original, pink circle instead of gray and I'm trying to show a little playfulness that Brandi's personality reflects. Again, if everyone thinks it's shit... than I'll start from scratch... won't be the first time.
Here are the edits... original draft can be seen above ^
- bulletfactory0
your elements are dangerously small, the tag is hard to read even at this size - any smaller and it will be lost.
- plus, the bra in the 'oo' is a 1st generation idea - push it furtherbulletfactory
