Brochure Cover Crit
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- non0
Your handwritting isn't really nice. I would also suggest changing photos.
I also find that this specific mix of type and handwritting don't really complement each other too well.
- johndiggity0
too much hi-liter. i'd lose the photos on the cover as well and hand draw the brochure title..
- dMullins0
I agree, too much highlighter. It looks intentional and pedantic, rather than curt and clever.
I would lose the photo for something that doesn't look like it was ripped from a fashion magazine. I get what you're going for though.
- magnificent_ruin0
I think it's a good idea, needs refinement and like everyone else said, brighter, more judicious use of highlighter
- formed0
It is lacking depth/contrast. Almost looks too 'real' - like just a scribble you wouldn't look twice at.
That image of the guy with the bright colors on his face - the arch/interior image posted above, is much clearer in its intention (although I still don't care for it, but I am old ;-) )
Photo change is a good idea. Maybe something that can tie the 'old/boring' brochure with the 'cleverly marked up' brochure.
It doesn't have to look literally like highlighter. Make it punch and use it selectively.
- max_prophet0
Firstly, it doesn't look like highlighter, it looks like someone was bored out of their minds and pissed off.
Red pen is pretty much universally understood as being a corrective notation made by tutors, so this doens't really send the right message.
I'd try using a fluro yellow marker.
Is that just the cover? because it doesn't really gel, it's just all over the place and plonked on there. I'd also look at what your images are saying because for a marketing course, I can't really see what you are marketing here. Is that lighting strips? Lose it. The face is enough if a picture of some lighting strips is all else you have. People don't choose a university because you have strip lighting.
Make it say something. You need a mission statement or something that either makes a stance, informs or gets you at least a little excited.
- why not simply highlight just 'marketing' and 'indiana University' in yellow and that's it. No more pen.max_prophet
- And align the seal with IA centered next to it rather than these options.max_prophet
- and dont have one or two letters coming over the photomax_prophet
- the more I look at this the worse and more shambolic it looks.max_prophet
- spot onian
- digdre0
looks nice, but reminds me of some h&m posters i saw here in the city, or some other store
- NO. It doesn't look nice, it looks like a mess. A BLOODY MESS!max_prophet
- max_prophet0
Imagine for a moment that I'm the Dean or the Principal of the University or whatever you heathens call it, I'M THE FUCKING BOSS OK?
P: OK, So, tell me what I'm looking at here...
- ian0
I have to say im not a fan of the design. I don't want to repeat what other people have said here, so I've made a note beside all the points I agree with that says 'spot on'. I hope this helps.
- 7point340
i agree with ian agreeing with max.