Site crit please
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- detritus0
Your page body layouts are great, but I'm not really feeling the header - the main logo doesn't sit elegantly and the bare green/orange combo is a little insipid. Also, the nav buttons are weak - personally, i don't like the font and counting how many fonts you've got there, I see 4 on the page (logo text and sub text, nav, then body) - I'd consider swapping the nav font for one of the others already used, maybe in a different weight.
Not sure if the green is a requirement, but I'd consider knocking everything back to bare bones white and black, then building the colour up from that - it's a bit dense and the white/green transition abrupt as it is.
One thing popped into mind - it could be a bit tacky, but have you tried a subtle cow skin pattern in the background? A nice, big family of blotches sitting on white could look really nice. Or terrible :)
One last thing - the logo looks like it might benefit from a touch of Filter > Sharpen.
- this man is a consultant!Corvo
- 'this man' is avoiding his own work, is all... :)detritus
- ahahah.Corvo
- thanks for your comments. really. these subtle things are what I am trying to improve on.jaylarson
- honestly, and not even nearly related, but "subtle cow" is a wonderful paradox. Ahahah. I love you.Corvo
- Wait... Jay is pissed.Corvo
- subtle cow? i dunnae wut dat meenzjaylarson
- ok detritus was somewhat patronizing but I think he didn't mean it that way.Corvo
- duh. i forgot he wrote that.jaylarson
- Patronizing, Corvo? What mad mountain tonic have you been supping this evening?detritus
- jaylarson0
ascii cows:
http://baetzler.de/humor/ascii_c…
- dbloc0
get rid of the green box on the bottom. and I agree with the comments above. Make the text more interesting and take colors from that photo.
- AssassinAve0
Sorry to say my friend it has a long way to go towards being a standout piece in your portfolio. Good for you for getting cash up front, but you gotta deliver whether you got paid 30 or 3000.
It looks like a raw template that you just filled in. There are major deficiencies in the hierarchy of the content(navigation, type size, images) and then there is the aesthetic component which is sort of the intangible you have to create.
Not really trying to be mean, but do you have any experience in web design? If so are you a designer or developer. You seem to need a designer if you are the latter.
I spend a lot of my time working for small clients in the same area and have to clean up messes like this quite often.
Design isn't something that is cool, its a profession that has serious practitioners that understand how to translate a business' value and goals into communications that speak effectively to their customers.
I viewed some of your other work and it doesn't really seem to be of much higher standard. I would say you need to pursue your strengths or work harder at becoming a designer/developer as it will only serve to make you more prosperous either way.
- exactly what i needed to hear! i am neither developer nor designer. learning on my own.jaylarson
- rtr0
JL sorry for posting that mean note on the first page, I didn't intend to sound so mean. I was just trying to tell you to forget about the compensation and just try to make it good.
Some things to think about:
-font choice
-color choice (green is good but maybe darker different hues)
-photos (put some love into them) gradients/borders maybeI can tell it's not a fun project but it is up to you to make it a little fun.
Good luck and sorry for the mean post earlier.- no problem. i'm a big boy. i don't take anything really personally.jaylarson
- ukit0
Let's face it, it's hard to make a bad-ass-looking site about cows.
- epete220
larsons website is creepy
- menos0
first thing i noticed:is there a special lorem ipsum cow breed i haven't heard about??
http://www.normandegenetics.com/…
below description of cow on top right side.
- BonSeff0
feel free to realize not everybody is looking to set the design world on fire with every project.
larson is one of the good guys, with a very good photographic eye,
maybe not so much with the blog design, but that's why he is leaning on qbn.
- Jaline0
wtf are you going about, rtr?
- nearestexit0
it needs more cowbell. i got the fever. and the only thing that's gonna cure it is more cowbell.
- nearestexit0
also, i would, really try to explore the space. i mean really. explore the space. i like what i'm seeing.
- jaylarson0
thanks for the comments everyone. there won't be much for added bling, but there are some changes i can make. the guy isn't paying me much, so only a few changes are able to be made. good night.
- killerqueen0
Is this a joke?
30 hours????? for this piece of shit?
- Did that feed your corpulent ego a little? Fatten it up for the weekend? Good. Good for you. Pat yourself on the back.detritus
- thismanslife0
WTF@this thread...
Emperors new clothes?
- Instead of being all superior - why not offer your own suggestions if you think something's amiss?detritus
- I'm just *really* surprised.thismanslife
- Well...look at what the site is for...Jaline
- thanks for sticking up for the design process and each's development detrius. you'd made a good teacher too.jaylarson