Business card redesign
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- Andys81
Hi there need some advice about a new buisiness card I have designed for myself, any coments would be most helpful.
What do you guys think?Thanks
- phatlee0
Hmmn... not sure. I can see what you've tried to do, but it looks as though it took 10 secs.
Why has 'Email' got an uppercase 'E'?
- ********0
I like it but I think the type comes across as being not being refined enough for my liking.
e.g.
The leading is far to wide for what I would do.
The shape of the paragraph forms inside the card looks awkward too. I would look at perhaps shrinking it to make it sit better within the frame.
The leading suggestion above might help with this as well.
With the italcised elements for name, etc. I am not sure you need to underline them as well.
HTH
- Andys810
Cheers phatlee, yea I see what you mean about the uppercase E will sort that. It did'nt take very long was just an idea that I wanted to start to develop.
Any other comments about the font, txt etc...?
- Nairn0
Jeez-oh, man - 'buisiness'?
I'm no typophile, but that feels vaguely like Msoft Word output rather than well laid-out text from someone who knows better.
I really like the idea though - but as Phatlee says, it just feels a bit rough.
I'd break up the telephone number into discrete chunks and put a full stop in between 'Graphic Designer' and 'to contact him'. I'd also think long and hard about whether 'Graphic Designer' should be initial-capped.
- weestu0
you've spelt business wrong too :P
- TheBlueOne0
I get it. But type is too big, leading too much, and for god sakes don't capitalize that "e" on email. The eye goes right to it.
Also, if you're going to be that snarky about the business card, go all the way:
"Hi. I am the business card of..."
- emecks0
I also like the idea and agree with all the above points so far too.
Something else I found was
"the business card of Andrew Sanders" sounds clumsy,
"Andrew Sanders' business card" would be better I think.
- phatlee0
How were you thinking of printing it?
This would suit it:
http://www.etapes.com/blog/?q=no…
- Andys810
Thanks for all the input, but spelling business wrong sorry that's terrible! I will do some tweaks and post the new one up for some more comments.
Cheers again
- mydo0
it's ugly but i like it.
make it uglier and it will be beautiful. make it all bigger, have it falling off the edges. awkward line heights etc.then have it printed on 400 weight paper with raised type.
YES
- Andys810
Thats a nice idea phatlee I was thinking of a gloss on the txt?
- paraselene0
where is the design?
where is the punctuation?
where is the spell check?
it's kind of a clever idea, but the only thing on this card that gives the impression that you are a graphic designer is the fact that it says so, and to be honest, i'd need a bit more proof than that if i were going to give you some of my hard-earned money.
you need to think about the typography! it's all you've got here. there's no logo, no colour - and don't get me wrong, i can appreciate the idea and the simplicity as well - but if you're selling yourself as a designer you need to sit down and seriously consider a few things:
1. i don't think a serif font works in this situation; i'd personally use helvetica, but maybe i've just spent too much time around snuggles.
2. there are two things that scream laziness to me: underlines and italics. these are typographical conventions which are used in certain circumstances: titles of novels, foreign words, etc. when you use them for emphasis and use them *together*, it looks like a cop-out. if i wanted to highlight certain parts of the text in this particular situation, i'd use a colour or a percentage black or a slightly heavier typeface or try to set them aside spatially somehow.
3. email should be lower case (as has been said before). you also have three sentences there and only one full stop. there ought to be a comma, as well.
again, the idea is kind of compelling, but to make it work you have to have a bit of panache and confidence. this looks like a text message. i don't mean to be harsh, but you need a rethink.
- Andys810
Thanks, I need people to be harsh as this just means you have taken time to look at the design!
I am having a redesign at the mo will post up the results!
- ********0
i think a serif font IS the only way to go here. I don't think lack of a logo is a problem.
however, you need some pretty good typographic skillz to pull this off, or it'll just look rubbish (which it currently does).
- mydo0
save money, print it out on the cheapest printer you can find, then stick the paper on to cereal boxes, then cut out with scissors. (not knife and ruler).
and don't worry about it being correct english, it's the sign or a true graphic designer.
spell check killed my inner child.
- ********0
And what's going on the other side? It needs something.
- Andys810
Do you think? I had'nt thought about putting anything on the reverse, any suggestions?
- Nairn0
"1. i don't think a serif font works in this situation; i'd personally use helvetica, but maybe i've just spent too much time around snuggles."
I wonder how that sounds to someone who doesn't know that 'snuggles' is a friend.
- mydo0
i thought snuggles could be an ugly serif font
- emecks0
where is the design?
where is the punctuation?
where is the spell check?
it's kind of a clever idea, but the only thing on this card that gives the impression that you are a graphic designer is the fact that it says so, and to be honest, i'd need a bit more proof than that if i were going to give you some of my hard-earned money.
you need to think about the typography! it's all you've got here. there's no logo, no colour - and don't get me wrong, i can appreciate the idea and the simplicity as well - but if you're selling yourself as a designer you need to sit down and seriously consider a few things:
1. i don't think a serif font works in this situation; i'd personally use helvetica, but maybe i've just spent too much time around snuggles.
2. there are two things that scream laziness to me: underlines and italics. these are typographical conventions which are used in certain circumstances: titles of novels, foreign words, etc. when you use them for emphasis and use them *together*, it looks like a cop-out. if i wanted to highlight certain parts of the text in this particular situation, i'd use a colour or a percentage black or a slightly heavier typeface or try to set them aside spatially somehow.
3. email should be lower case (as has been said before). you also have three sentences there and only one full stop. there ought to be a comma, as well.
again, the idea is kind of compelling, but to make it work you have to have a bit of panache and confidence. this looks like a text message. i don't mean to be harsh, but you need a rethink.
paraselene
(Mar 8 07, 02:38)the only thing in your post that gives the impression you don't mean to be harsh is the fact it says so.