site crit please
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- leftwave
i'm redesigning this site:
http://gromproject.org/target audience is surfer kids (8-18) and their parents. all feedback is encouraged!
http://leftwave.com/indevelopmen…
- ender790
slick design. a billion times better than the original. i especially dig the footer graphic. nice touch.
- monNom0
I find the mission statement gets lost a bit, but maybe it's not as important as the feature boxes below? I'd go up to 11/12px type. maybe a bit more padding around it.
Some of your hard edges/lines in the structure seem a bit out of place with the grungy surf style.
how about having that nice grungy border (from the features) bleed into the wave image? maybe break up the structural components a bit with some weathering?
first post was right: a million times better than what they had before.
- jarredbishop0
looks good. fits the target audience well. i agree with what has been said above and would like to add that i dont think the font you've used for the headings 'our mission, fitness, education, community etc' works. I would lose it and use the one you've used for 'Get Involved, What's New, etc'. also i'd add a little more padding around the words in the nav.
nice work tho.
- lvl_130
wow! looks much better!
i would def. lose that font for your nav...doesn't fit. the bottom and top graphics are nice and i really like the colors of the 4 pack of widgets you got. i would def. lose that thick brown border all together as well. and probably the right side blue rule as well.
- lvl_130
my fault, there is no blue rule on the right side doh! i must have accidentally selected it or something :)
- ukit0
The background image is cool but on a big screen you can see the edges. Also looks like it is currently aligned to the bottom because I get a gap at the top (I realize it's just a comp).
- wendog0
links at the top seem too clean or untreated compared to the gritty nature of everything else on the site...great colors overall (although im not feeling the off-green at the bottom right module - im a surfer and it reminds me of vomit in the water haha :) Otherwise, real cool and you hit the target market pretty good...I think it might actually be too clean in some parts to be appealing to kids who are used to Volcom, vonzipper and such - although - you probly know your audience better than i do...hope that helps
~ Andrew
- johndiggity0
honestly i think it's a little too boxed in and too restrained. have some fun with the layout, look at carson's surfer layouts. it just doesn't have that edge and kids will pick up on that.
- leftwave0
thanks for the feedback! i took some of your advice and made some changes. which background image do you like better? i'm not sure what sort of font to use for the navigation bar... any suggestions? feedback?
- madirish0
nice work leftwave, i would listen to diggity on that a bit though- loosen up the structure a bit and make it a bit more flow.
i like the color palette a lot though, and new image is dope.
- lvl_130
i'd say the nav is getting there but could still use some work. i really am still drawn (not in a good way) to that thick brown rule around the majority of the site content...as someone said, it's just too heavy and makes it become very boxed.
i kinda pref. the old bg image. had more of a surf and less of a beach feel.
- mimeartist0
such a shame to have that cool background iamge covered up though.
- k0na_an0k0
i like the after background image. real nice.
i like the site layout. very cool. what about if you put a 10pt (or whatever) stroke on the outside edges of the site to give it a solid boundary on the page?
really sharp.
you on oahu leftwave? we should have been up when i was there in 2005. :(
- JSK0
the type seems off. keep them consistent and its usage
type could be bigger also
revisit information hierarchy, it seems little blend to have those info up there in front.
something more exciting.
- HelixDnB0
"wow! looks much better!
i would def. lose that font for your nav...doesn't fit. the bottom and top graphics are nice and i really like the colors of the 4 pack of widgets you got. i would def.
lvl_13
(Jan 15 07, 18:50)"Agreed with what he says
Great work, and a much better improvement compared to the other one.
- Bluejam0
i'd move the logo to the left side and the telephone number to the right and ditch that dark brown header graphic (the background image is so much more powerful) and move the centered content up. keep the logo and telephone number fixed just like the background image.
and forget carson, he's last centruy
- GT_10
Quit saying it's better than the original, shit on a stick would have been better than the original site. It's empty praise.
Leftwave, the site you made looks like it's for a surf camp or something similarly run-of-the-mill. That is to say, boring and uninspired. It could be selling health insurance with just a change in photography.
- Nairn0
Got nothing to add to the above, but I just wanted to congratulate you on this one, Leftwave - you're coming on in leaps and bounds, keep up the good work!
- abba_cadaver0
I think you have a all the elements in place, you just need to refine (or unrefine) it. I would work on loosening up the layout and on the type.
Using site like this http://www.oneill.com/ for inspiration
- traut0
dramatic improvement !