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- ********0
very nice!
i didnt read the other threads... but spread those stars out a little & make some smaller and bigger to add some dimension.
- rasko40
i do quite like the colours however, though I may make it more monotone, with more depth of shade, and add detail to the illustration, eg; the clouds look lazily drawn, just a few circles, needs more crafting, this just looks like a quick job, same goes for mthe duping of the stars.
Whats needed here is more time spent, but maybe thats not justified.
- e_b_c0
hey jevad,
i really like the illutration. if it were me, i would try a version without the drop shadows behind the clouds, mountains, etc. and just let the tonal division do the work. Also, it may look a little more natural if you swap the tones of the hills so that they get lighter as they go back, and give you some atmospheric perspective.
love the colors.
- jevad0
the words namby pamby spring to mind, but I think it can be saved, to be honest, it's the copy/words/lyrics whatever they are that do it, just seems a bit soppy and esoterically whiny, but in a way that makes me not care that you are a hobbit with this big journey, and this evil thing you must dispose of.
rasko4
(Jan 7 07, 16:38)I'm going to have to buy you a pint or two for that gem the next time I am back in londres.
Thanks all - ebc nice call on the tones.
Some really great feedback and suggestions here and I really appreciate it!
- M0NEYCIDE0
"namby pamby"
- jevad0
shut your cake hole
- version30
calm down meow!
- ********0
I really like it, alot...I think you have wonderful colors and a really ethereal/evening feel to it which is really nice. I think you can push the type a little farther by integrating it more...It feels like you added it quickly, compared to the more thought out and elegant illustrations.
- Arran0
I think it looks nice, and i wouldnt really change the layout myself, but one thing i just thought about...
bearing in mind your adding shadow to all the necessary components of the landscape (to create depth presumably), why not have a go at set building it on a very small scale and then photographing it? This can be a great way in whcih to create real depth to the imagery.
Sorry if this has already been mentioned...havent read through all the posts.
Anwyays...looks good.
- Dancer0
hmmmm.
I wouldn't pick it up, looks "nice" but is not gonna shake the ground. What is the music? Is it quite easy listening stuff?
- jevad0
oh dancer it's not for general release btw.
Nairn thanks - I was looking at something a little more obscure than the dippers but those are probably the most recognizeable I guess. I'm working in it at the moment and it looks pretty sweet actually...quite subtle - but I knocked the other stars back a bit and made the dipepr stars a bit bigger and it looks pretty sweet.
Working on the type a bit too.
Thanks
- spendogg0
Nice Nic, very dreamy - colors are nice and the bold shapes feel good. the only thing that stands out is the stars - they look a bit placed, not natural. I will be expecting my copy shortly. :)
- Soler0
couple notes on the text: I don't think the initial cap on the "i" in "i'll miss you" is helping- just make it all same size caps. Also, it's a little weird to have a comma after "kiss" but no period after "try".
Design is really nice, although I though the thing on the back was a volcano. Also, one thing that helps with stars is making some a lighter opacity- it adds depth.
almost there- good work jevad
- jevad0
Yeah someone on YH picked up on that descrepancy in teh type - I never really liked it there anyway - I might just take it out competely
- TheBlueOne0
I like it..what typeface is that by the way?
- jevad0
It's called The Mix, and it's part of the Thesis family
- TheBlueOne0
Thanks...I actually think I have that floating around on my hard drive somewhere...
- ********0
the mountains look like a face sideways...
I like it, would look good on a very matt / low grade stock
- madirish0
i have been called a lot of things, but 'low grade stock' is just below the belt...