flyer crit
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- Blofeldt0
I don't like it. It looks very college student. Too busy and too heavy. I like the clothing line's name. I don't think you've really thought about doing something interesting with it or considered approaching it differently. It's a very formulaic approach you've taken and I don't think it's at all 'fashion' and does absolutley nothing for the clothes, doesn't make an impact, doesn't look interesting or build a brand.
Sorry if that sounds harsh but you asked for a crit, good luck with the next incarnation.
- tara|gee0
all that drop shadow probably isnt going to print too well... :(
- Vain0
you think? that bad, eh? i thought it was kinda neat.
oh well.....
- _theo0
I would have to agree with blo i'm afraid. The lillustrated lady, which is well drawn, looks like a cheap stripper. Now i'm sure that's not the image you wish to portray. There are a number of contributing factors: the spotlight, the stage (rather than catwalk), the outfit.
My advice would be keep the idea, change the execution. Use a classier illustration and contemporary typography.
- menia0
If she says: ''Over my naked body'' Try make her look better so people actually want to see her naked body.
What I want to say is make her look better.
- Vain0
yea...im with you on that. i got lazy and didnt feel like making a catwalk. typography....i'm not very good with. what do you mean by more contemporary?
i can't change the illustration because these are the kinds of clothes she designs,
- agentfour0
simplify!!
use 3 or 4 colours.
loose the pattern bg and dropshadows.
there are some nice elements in there that can be used.
- save0
don't like it.
COLOURS
Cut down on the number of colours. Choose a more contemporary pallette, what you seem to have is very dull, and very studenty...CHARACTER
Simplify the character or delete it completely and just have a typographic approach. Or have an abstract shot of part of a womans body.TYPOGRAPHY
Change the font and lose the colours. Tighten up the kerning....
- menia0
amen
- iDp0
1) Your main objective with this should be to push your girls clothing. Right now it looks like you are going after a bad club cliche flyer from the mid 90's. Give this thing a touch factor give it some class.
2) I would look into even printing this differently maybe a thin news print type of thing...black ink on a thin colored or natural paper. Think classy yet bold and homegrown. Homegrown can usually cost a lot less you just have to get creative with it.
3) I'm going back to bed, I expect something 'different and interesting when I wake' :)
check out the stuff he did for anna sui (sp?). Get outside the box on this one...its for a clothing label for gods sake...you can do it...I can feel that you will hit this nail on the head.
- vespa0
how did she get those boots on? she's got the shortest arms i've ever seen!
- Fade2Grey0
I agree she has the arms of a carnie, other than that I agree with the other constructive crits.
- armed_rob0
I dont like it – and im sorry to say I think I never will!
Take some close up pictures of the clothing insted...
sorry!