A1 Poster Crit !?
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- blackspade
hey peps...
Im after some feedback on this poster (2 mockups)
http://webdev3.otago.ac.nz/~phut…
Brief was:
"NZ National Anthem in 2 languages, Englsih, Maori.
the audience is high schools. We can either go real funky tribal, or trad.cultural. Your call. I'm happy for you to explore colours, or perhaps B & W- but it MUST look like it came out of Otago University, Uni brand fonts"
'get Enlightened'
feedback !?
- swollenelbow0
i like two. simple. everything fits in two. negative space is perfect. try once more to move the elements around. you know...
- blackspade0
oh... and the shapes to the right is the outline of New zealand
and there are baby ferns comming out of it, which is a Trad NZ plant, represents life, growth etc, which kinda fits in with the whole university Learning, 'Get Enlightened theme'
i think if it was a International poster it would get lost, but kids from NZ will know what it is strait away :)
- blackspade0
thanks swollen
have moved things aaround a bit ...struggling to fit those 2 paragraphs in on some layouts, since they are so tall n skinny u know what I mean
ill tidy up those hill vector landscapes also eventually
thanks dude!
- swollenelbow0
maybe try to break up the "kite ....." and the "get enlight..."
a bolder "kite ..." above and to the slihgt left of the object on the top right, and the "get enlighte..." around where it is now...
dunno...it's tough, especially if you've been staring at it for hours! =)
- swollenelbow0
stand back. smoke a j...drink a dr pepper, and come back to it in 45 minutes. =)
- blackspade0
thanks man ill try it :)
BTW
love this poster of your site...
- BonSeff0
color please
and have some fun with the typography. looks way stodgy
- blackspade0
the only reason I went blk n white was because of the size it will stand out
also with the typosgraphy, I have to use these fonts so? hmmm what do you mean by stodgy?
The uni colours are primary colours, blue red and yellow
no way I want to use Primary colours! but any suggestions ?
- lind0
I like #2.
I would use a more decorative font for "Kite Whatchamacalit ..." Make it stand out more.
- blackspade0
also one other thing
the area that the ferns are coming out of on the NZ shape is 'Dunedin' which is where the University is based, so thats why I have them growing out from the bottom
- blackspade0
thanks Lind
I may try that, the Third font they have in their 'brand' is Airstream
which is that font the the 'Get there' is writen in grey. Its kinda too 'Fun' lookin, doesnt suit the poster
- blackspade0
anyone else ? :)
- BonSeff0
this is a real quick and dirty example of what i mean
i mean of its a poster, why just have color in the logo/crest.
i dunno, just a suggestion
- blackspade0
thanks Bon
yea the het there has to be in Airstream font :( as that has been a constant in all their print material
but dont mind what youve done with the colour
but still very keen on B & W
- BonSeff0
thats cool man.
just one dudes opinion
too bad they picked airstream eh
- blackspade0
thanks everyone! im off home, time for dinner :)
now all i gotta do is run it passed the client
*gulp :/
- freshmode0
It looks good to me but I agree with a bit of color included. You can do some good stuff with heavy solids in the background and maybe even some sort of reflection in the water of something related to the school or location or audience.
Maybe add some detail to the black areas to more obvious to those who will see it but not know what it is. Even though it is in the native area anyways. Right?
Please update your progress. I would like to see how this turns out.
word!
- blackspade0
hey Freshmode
thanks for that feedback, great idea about the reflection * :)
newstoday is so great for stuff like this im stoked
im thinking of adding that grey pattern as a reflection in the waterbut bend it into perspective and tile it as water
stay posted for version 3 :)
- blackspade0
versions 4,5
file:///Users/phuture/Sites/blac...
file:///Users/phuture/Sites/blac...
preferences ? thoughts on the pattern in water? im not sure about it