first viral crit
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- 74LEO0
night vision...luv it! did you do up the wallpaper? epic!
- citizen_h0
I like what your trying to achieve and I thought it was funny in places but also after scenes did get a bit predictable.
A couple of suggestions:- Maybe having less people in some of the actual shots. For example
you could have people behind the camera saying "no its that button.." and I dunno night vision suddenly starts up or something??.- Could make some elements of the equipment really low tech. For example using a actual broom handle for the boom operator coming into a shot or using a broom handle for a tripod leg???
Keeping in the same vain as 'all the gear but no idea'.
- ceiling_cat0
LOL
- 74LEO0
Is this from a freelance perspective? I mean I know i did some ghetto production in my time to get paid. what was said in a previous post you need to go bigger. maybe a smoke machine electrical failure, fire alarm floor falls out do some after effects stuff. maybe too much power and you open a black hole. i dont know shit like that yaah!
- 74LEO0
Original: Has a really funny blooper making of video
Click on how we do it<<<
http://whoswestudios.com/flashsi…
- Frosty_spl0
Seems too predictable. Not very funny either.
- fugged0
Nice work mate.
I think the text is cumbersome to read the way it's spread out. It just doesn't flow for me. I'd almost prefer to see it all in once screen, with the exception of the "Isn't it". Maybe it's because I have no short term memory though :)
- +1 .. the gap is too long, they become words, rather than a sentence.lukus_W
- Projectile0
a bit of fuzzy broken camera distortedness (fuck i cant think what to call it) when the camera falls should be easyish..? just stick a few frames of conpletely random shapes and colour.
maybe some bleeped out swearing? ...but yeah it didnt take me long to realise it was staged. (but then again I am one seriously sharp muthafucker. *puts on shades*)
- 74LEO0
Om! Was that it? Viral bloopers?
- raf0
I love it, just not sure about its viral potential.
- TheBlueOne0
Well done Janne...
- whereRI0
over the top id say. needs to be more subtle. filming etc is fine but the writing/script needs to be looked at...
(my 2 cents)
- Well, without wanting to generalise, Dutch humour is a little OTT anyway. Look at De Lullo's/Jiskefet.Continuity
- bulletfactory0
well done - i liked it.
- janne760
very good point, Continuity. Thanks!
and lol PIZZA, good point!
- PIZZA0
needs more cats or it'll never be viral
- Continuity0
@janne, re: your note about head-banging
Well it's more for future reference, I suppose. A good twist on the idea would have been you successfully navigating the doorway, but - because you were so focussed on making sure you don't bean yourself on the frame - you snag your foot on something on the other side of the door, and trip. Something like that, just to disrupt the viewer's expectations a bit.
- janne760
yeah, you think the smoke looks realistic enough? it was done in post production....
- Looks good to me. But then I'm no expert.NickInfozure
- But I have eyes and it looked like smoke.NickInfozure
- NickInfozure0
Like it. The smoke from the light at the end is a nice touch.
- janne760
thanks, guys.
Sony handicam HC 37 or something like that, meant to look like cheap video. no depth and all that...