first viral crit
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- Continuity0
Out of sheer curiosity, what was this shot with?
- Continuity0
Agreed, with Mr Mullins, it's funny overall. I like the concept a lot, but indeed there are bits of it that seem forced or predictable. For example, right at the beginning where you knock your head on the door frame; before you do so, it seems to me you're looking right at it, so my first thought was, 'Gee, I didn't see THAT coming.' And the bit when you're fiddling with the tripod upside down seemed un-natural.
I'm picking nits, though. Like I said, it's a great concept; the pacing, scenarios and actions just need to be more refined to look natural and spontaneous, without so much telegraphing.
- agreed about the head knock... couldn't change much about it after this though...janne76
- and thanks a lot for the thorough crit!!janne76
- My pleasure, I certainly didn't intend to come off as a jerk. Like I said, I really like the idea. :)Continuity
- ukit0
I have no context at all, but its pretty damn funny
- dMullins0
I think it's funny overall. There are some parts that come off as forced, such as when you snap the tripod closed on your finger.
Good stuff though. Is there going to be more?
- d_rek0
More Tent. It stays.
- janne76
a first, just trying out, we made this quickly. me starring in it, for a company of someone i know.
please comment, say what would be more effective etc. thanks!