Critique required of our flash portfolio.
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- Continuity0
And what's with this:
"They can also develop projects with ‘content management systems’"
Why is content management systems in quotes? This is what they're _actually_ called. It's not what just some people call them, and you cite that because you either don't believe that's what they're called, or you just haven't got a term for it yourself; they're really, really called content management systems, and you don't need to put quotes around the term, I promise you.
- Continuity0
Also:
'The company is in it’s 7th year [...]'
The company is in it is 7th year, is it? No. Revise to:
'The company is in its 7th year'. No apostrophe.
Honestly, you don't put apostrophes where you need to, and you add them where you don't. What's with that?
- Continuity0
'If you have a project, then please get in touch to receive a free quote.'
Clumsy. All of my cost estimates are free, I'd wouldn't dream of charging for that, and I don't know anyone who would, except massive global agencies pitching for a major account.
- ernexbcn0
Lets down.
- utopian0
Look's great's
Sent's from my iPad's
- Ancillary0
Can I just say that 3D racing game is bad arse(Australian spelling), I have no idea how you made that in Flash! It's got to be Director 3D yeah?
- ali0
You need to hire a copywriter
- _niko0
split 'em up game was fun
- ali0
Thoughts that come to mind:
- dated
- unbold the copy it's not easy on the eye
- the overall design and composition could much better reflect your strengths or feature what you do
- what's with the aliased, black stroked boxes are you trying to look old-school? It's heavy, let your work 'speak' loudest.
- the buttons at the top seem out of place