how to write in english?
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- pascii
Is this correct?
SaturdaySpecial
With Drinks and Music at 7.11.2009
At the following Stores10 % Discount of the new collection, just be there!
- Stugoo0
re above
not sure about the at 7.11.2009.
or the full stop after collection.
that's personal.is 'SaturdaySpecial' the name of the event? otherwise is it _a_ Saturday Special ... it might need a space in the middle.
removed the space between '10' & '%' so
10 %
>
10%anyone else?
- graham0
10% Discount *off* the new collection. Just be there!
?
- hans_glib0
10% discount off the new collection
"off", not "of"
- neverblink0
10% off of the new collection?
- marky_brown0
no its 10% of off the new collection.
off always comes after of ... like i before e
- Jnr_Madison0
This thread sums up QBN perfectly.
- detritus0
Don't know if it's just me, but the date looks odd broken down by '.'s.
Personally, I'd maintain the conversational tone and say something along the lines of 'Saturday Special, 7th November 2009'.
But hej, this has probably already become more confusing than you intended.
- When I say 'odd', I mean 'continental'. But then I am a frog-hating xenophobe, so best just ignore me.detritus
- kelpie0
although you probably should start a sentence with "With" either.
- juhls0
SaturdaySpecial
With drinks and music
November 7th, 2009At the following Stores:
[list]10 % discount off the new collection. Just be there!
(make the drinks and music and 10% discount part larger or more noticeable; maybe the date too).
- juhls0
Actually, I'll continue with comicsans' work:
Saturday Special
November 7th, 2009
10% discount off the new collectionAt the following stores:
....
With drinks and music. Just be there!
- tgqt0
pascii this screams out to me as someone using the visual design as a wireframe. e.g. - lets see what it looks like and THEN we can tweak the text.
The tweaked text will no doubt somehow effect the layout that you design for the first round.
- monospaced0
I would suggest removing "Just." Being there is clearly not enough if there are dancing, drinks and a discounted fall collection.
SaturdaySpecial
November 11, 2009 @ select stores
Drinks, music, and 10% off the new collection. Be there.
- bacon130
I think it is more like
10% off discount on the new collection- that's bad englishmonospaced
- the discount is already 10%, so you're implying 10% off of that discountmonospaced
- it is widely used though on a lot of websites!bacon13
- tasty0
it needs to be in all CAPS...BECAUSE YOUR CAPS KEY IS LOUD!
- iCanHazQBN0
You don't need the word "Just".