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- uncle_helv0
PS commerical rockstars perhaps one of the most amusing things I've heard drop out someone's mouth in here!
- where's it say it?********
- from an old thread (scroll down)
http://www.qbn.com/t…
uncle_helv - wow, how'd you remember that?********
- It just stuck in my mind! I want to be a design rockstar too, I play a mean air keyboard!uncle_helv
- where's it say it?
- uncle_helv0
Arrgh fookin deleted the content of my last post...
Yes I agree with most sentiments hierarchy is wrong (Platform Productions is way too big) the structure for the timetable is messy mixed alignments never seems to look right IMO, it is trying to be stylish, without thinking about the content, I remember you saying you want to be commercial rockstars, but an understanding of the basics principles of design is still required, you need to know the rules to break them! and then you are in 'designer rockstar heaven'
- ukit0
get philjohns to do it
- duckseason0
agree with pretty much everything already said.
"all dayer at the platform" just doesn't sound right to me. Why not just "all day"
- ********0
I don't get the white abstract shape around the header, looks completely out of place, please remove before I report you to the Swiss Design Police...
- airey0
whether the venue is the best known in the multiverse or not, add an address and a door time. the flyer should be to advertise the gig to all-comers, not just people ho know the joint already. otherwise you're just preaching to the converted.
sometimes that's what you want, sometimes it aint but with that timetable i'm guessing the client wants as many punters through the door as possible.
- airey0
oh, and in my opinion, forget half the wording advice above. different regions and different scenes are going to require different vernacular, if that's your scene and you speak that way then keep it. it's a club flyer so you can go hog-wild with the attempted 'cool' vibe. just be careful that you don't come off as trying to hard though. nothing less cool than a club that calls itself a 'cool place to hang' (which a club a mate worked at did. it wasn't.unless you did jack daniels t's and a 3-1 dude to chick ratio)
- rybo0
sorry i havent replied iv been sunning myself in the pub all afternoon/evening.
thank you for all that have commented and i agree in parts with most people i will defo work on the timetable.
the abstract shapes arn't so abstract it is the silouette of the building (the flapper)
the concept is to go uber modern very sleak modern design, there is a time and a place for narrative and this isent it, most times it is nessaserry but i personally believe for this type of client that narrative is the last think they want. they want a good looking flyers that will appear to normal folk no design guru's like you lot on here.
and i didn't just jump on the computer, i always start in my sketchbook and play around as people different things as i go along.
Q1. i had a idea for each event that a produce a flyer/poster for, keep the same template and change the colour and details,
what do you think?
obviously i will get the design spot on first.
- tank020
To be honest, you talk the talk but you don't walk the walk.
a lot of bold statements but those are not translated in your design.
I think you spend to much time on the concept ' i'm a free designer'.
Its like sagmeister says: 'trying to look good limits my life'
and you my friend try too much to look good.
- ********0
off the top of my head, wouldn't know without trying:
date smaller
time, em or en space, name left justified, 2 diff weights
delete empty bars
All Dayer more prominent and interacting with shape in some more unusual way
delete >>
delete diagonal lines bar
www left justified- delete stroke on helvetica, use different weights********
- bed time now try again 2moro.rybo
- delete stroke on helvetica, use different weights
- cramdesign0
it is improved. however, don't right align text unless there is a very good reason or someone makes you. (only then with a fight)
Is the date the most important thing? I think that it is your title "All Dayer at the Flapper." Not an easy fix.
You are doing well to be humble with this and wise to ask this lot for opinions. Most here are pros and many are among the best in the biz... (certainly not me though). Keep at it and you will be too. Let us see where this ends up.
- Knuckleberry0
bad
- Llyod0
use bolder type
- doesnotexist0
I don't see a concept at all, I would honestly start over fresh.
- ukit0
So what kind of music gets played at this place? Who do you think would go to the show? Right now, it's got a kind of Build/ TDR quality to it, so I'm hoping it's electronic or somethink they play there. Otherwise, maybe the concept needs some rethinking.
- sea_sea0
I would substitute the blue background with an image... it looks too flat, nothing we haven't seen before. I see the "style" your going for, but it is a party right? (just me)
- ********0
All Dayer - maybe use a crisp blue sky in the back ground with a couple of wispy clouds (make a feel for what the music is like) - that way is it still mainly blue but with some depth to it.
- I like the sound of that, as the design is blue already it wouldn't be too distracting, and it's relevant!uncle_helv
- my point exactly. : )sea_sea
- shame he niver listened tho' eh?********
- ********0
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- chossy0
Needs More, using the same username?..... aren't you rybo ye mad wee rocket ye!.
