Business Card crit
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- Concrete
Thoughts please guys.
I'm sick of looking at this now. I need accute observation.Thanks
- ********0
I don't like the separation of the details on the reverse.
You have mobile and email on the left (all on one line) and tel and fax on the right - on two lines. Inconsistent at least...
- kidswift-0
I think its spot on, I wouldn't beat yourself up over it. If the clients happy with it leave it as is, grab a mince pie and move on amigo!
- rasko40
having the strapline on the curve looks forced and is in no way benefitting the composition, I also feel the having 'The Solution' in bold is an idea that is trying too hard to little benefit. If the personal details are required to be seperate like that I suggest having them under the name, but at the bottom of the page, as for the address details etc I would have the address like so:
60 Churchill Square
Kings Hill
West Malling
Kent ME19 4YUAlso, having the Tel: and Fax: on seperate lines seems inconsistent with mobile: and email
- Concrete0
This is what I need. Thanks guys.
Keep it coming.
- paraselene0
i'm not sure about the 5mil difference in the colour blocks. it looks odd to me and if it were my card, i'd be annoyed that they were off.
- Concrete0
Not sure what you mean, para?
- ********0
wow.. at least use the same baseline and tracking for both sections of text. for real, that's messy.
- ********0
God i am annoyed by the unbalanced baseline.. for real, work on that or i am about to sodomize an innocent living creature..
- ********0
dont stop on his account Crouwel...
- Dancer0
what moth and crouwel said.
also I would get rid of the purple block on the white is needed.
Now get it to the press
- ********0
As objectively as possible...
The composition on both the front and back is static and in need of more asymmetry. On one side, there is something in every corner filling the space and not making use of any negative space. On the other side (with the curved line of typography) you've crated a diagonal compisition from one corner of the card to the opposing corner, again deadening the space.
Perhaps stripping out some of the unessentials like the little plus symbol or the purple field behind the typography, and then getting all the information together so that you are left with some white space to work with and reintroduce additional elements sparingly and where it helps.
2 cents
- ********0
crit my shit threads are always brutal on mondays
- ********0
like mondays should be.
- ********0
what da fuck did you just say to me?
- phatlee0
Could you not have a one corner which is round?
- ********0
the essential question that no one has had the heart to put yet: why business cards? why?
- Concrete0
That would be nice, phatlee, but I've already used their budhet on die-cutting the headed paper and comp-slips.
Rasko & Dancer good advice as per usual. Thanks letters.
Thanks everyone.
I know the baseline of off - I haven't put it into Quark yet.(Yes I fucking hate Quark)
- ********0
j/k
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- kelpie0
they're fucking enormous, concrete, how are they ever going to fit in a wallet?
- Concrete0
Frigg. I new using the OHP was a bad idea.