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- leftwave
i'm designing a site for a landscaping company in honolulu
all feedback is welcome:
http://leftwave.com/indevelopmen…
- rasko40
not much to look at, looks ok. why is the angled corner missing on 'contact'?
- rasko40
the title seems to be outside of the site, why not put it inside?
- nocomply0
Good start, but a lot of green there. Maybe change the BG color, and make the nav a color other than green so it pops out against those leave things you got going on.
- tarnation0
I'd move the title baseline up so its not squasked against the block beneath it.
- PonyBoy0
this is one of those times when DIN is the wrong choice.
... lil heavy on the green, too.
... and two thirds of your 'working space' is angled-leaves w/a 'hidden' navigation system... seems like you were just trying to fill up space, rather than use it effectively... and the green 'tabs' for the links get lost in the leaves...
... so... ease up on the green a bit first... perhaps tone the background down... and maybe lose either the top or bottom 'leaf' header... it's over-kill and disturbs your focal point: the information/links.
- e-pill0
the image is blurry and has ispokphoto written all over it.
the flower that breaks the border makes no sense and is overlyy sharpened against the blurry istock photo looks really weird.
the leaf patterns on the top and bottom which display the folliage in a diagonal pattern make my eyes bounce and doesnt give me and real sense of focal point.
the phone number whcih also is touching the leaf pattern on a diagonal is also to close to each other giving the eyes yet antoher un-comfortable bounce, try making a space between the bottom of the numbers and the top of the leaf pattern.
your font choice on the bottom and in the main area of verbage is very small and the edges are edgy...smooth it out by using a larger font size.
can you use more of the green negative space??
you are advertising a landscape designer correct?? but you are using the smallest amount of "LANDSCAPE" of the webpage you are building the site for.
maybe use more of that space to help strengthen the salability of the landscaper you are building the site for.
nice start...but you need to work on it more and flesh it out.
- josimarX0
aloha ainal landscaping
it's kinda like Pen Island.com
- Nairn0
i dig the green.
i agree with what rasko says about the header text - either lift it or integrate it - the button 45° cutoffs are a bit naff too.
i like where you're going with the flower detail - but I'd do more with it - have it jut out more than 15 pixels - make it bigger and think about how it is just sliced off at the base, which isn't very organic.
the bullet point text is terribly aligned - what's with all that space to the left?
whilst i kind of like the palm leaf background, it's not very specific - it's not screaming 'landscaping' at me.. i would hope that it would change depending on what section i'm in or have a bit more to it.
a few tweaks here and there, and you'll have a solid wee company site - good luck!
- Antonelli0
Make the Navigation Tabs all the same width.
- two-zero0
lose the outter glow and make the bird of paradise cut out of the box more. right now its only out of the box a few pixels so it's not doing much.
can you clean up the accent marks on the logo or is that their brand? It's making screwy kerning between Aloha and Aina.
make you nav tabs equal widths and maybe a darker color.
and there's my 2¢ ... looks good.
- leftwave0
you guys are awesome!
thanks for all the feedback :)ponyboy, if not DIN, then what? any alternate font recommendations??
- jevad0
It's very...'boxy'. Your client is a landscaping company and probably makes great use of negative space and form.
Translate this to your design.
- wendog0
needs more gusto...Looks too templatey - what sets it apart from any other site out there, and how does this tie into the clients work