Crit – moving card
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- who
http://www.freewebs.com/agapisey…
I'd like to hear your opinions about the moving out company card.
- kelpie0
concepts good, but the execution could be tighter... maybe try to integrate the branding and what-not into the idea more (make all the elements look like part of the cardboard packaging/labeling?).
- skt0
Don't like it. Don't like the photographic elements.
Cardboard could work but be more illustrative with the text - add some doodles. Have some fun with it.
- vespa0
none of the elements on the card have any visual relation to each other, except the coffee stain and the cardboard.
perhaps if you used that sort of treatment for some of the other elements it would hang together better. also the layout is quite weak, there's no visual rhythm or tension.
- SPYK0
why not actually draw the elements onto the cardboard, lay the mouse & scissors on it and take a photo?
- who0
thank you all......
I did some more.......
Please I'd like to hear which is the best....
- skt0
3 is the best. But you should work on the cardboard one more - it could be nice.
- josimarX0
I like 4, typography needs work. I would maybe scale the chair up and get a nice detail composition going on. Probably scale your text down to half what it is.
- wasps0
i think 3 is the strongest, although imho the type would work better all in red.
1 + 2 are a little weak and maybe a little too childish, and 4 is ok but the type placement feels a tad awkward.
- thebattle0
Number 3 looks the strongest out of them all - 1 and 2 aren't eye-catching enough, I don't think, especially with the handwritten typography you've chosen. 3 looks great though, just needs a bit of tweaking. Strong image, will look nice printed.
- todelete__20
i like #3
- bulletfactory0
3rd time was a charm
- who0
Thanks to everyone.......
:)
Many kisses.......
:X
- Dancer0
I prefer 3 but the card board has potential.
with 4 I have a suggestion:
print out your copy and then place bubble wrap over the top and photograph, a bit like the card is wrapped.
or
zoom in tight on the bubble wrap......am I making any sense?
- jdcomba0
i like 3 the best, but 4 could work.
- TResudek0
I like the visuals of 3 and 4 but the typography is weeeeeaaak. The cardboard thing and the coffee stain thing are both way played out at this point.
TR
- who0
nice idea........
i'll try it........
thanks :)
- who0
I am trying to find bubble wrap....
:P
- spendogg0
#3 is nice, go with it, or you could get like 4 people in a box, put address lables on their forheads and take a pic.
- vespa0
I think 4 is the most quirky/creative but the typography needs work. it's overcooked at the moment.
3 is working well in terms of layout but looks much more corporate.
so what kind of company do you want to present yourself as, quirky and creative or clean and corporate?
- who0
so what kind of company do you want to present yourself as, quirky and creative or clean and corporate?
vespa
(Jul 27 05, 07:56)
===========generally I want something clean and corporate, that's why I made the #3 and #4.... But I like the organic idea...