Bus Card Crit
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- vb_0
- clerk0
needs more work on the logo, it looks unbalanced.
- tehgee0
so there are no grey lines? im confused... :P
- vb_0
i always say biz card here in nl. i thought you sjankees were cool like that as well.
guess i need to get wid da program.
carry on.
- tehgee0
hmm could u put the url on the side with the logo only on it? and then put all the info dowmn the bottom on the other side? also are u def in love with the serif fACE ON YOUR LOGO?
- Witt0
yo dude, work more on it. it needs to grow. that's been done a zillion times already. sorry for being rough but it's the truth.
- myobie0
yeah, i know...
not too rough...
just trying to work it out a bit...
probly do what was requested, drop info down, link on other side...
logo needs a bit of balancing as was mentioned...
anything else is much appreciated..will update the bus card when i return from the store...
- dirtydesign0
I kinda liked the 'dashed line' accident. Maybe work that in.
Lookin good, just needs more time.
- boiconet0
Kinda harks back to the glory days of computing in the late 80s. Avenir is nice though.
- Solid0
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Side 1: Try reducing the mark and 'MYOBIE' -- need more whitespace between mark and 'MYOBIE', and more whitespace on left/right edges--
Side 2: already contains the domain name -- why repeat yourself unless the website domain is different?In any event, I don't think you want to put text that close to the bottom-edge of the card .. likewise the mark is too close to the top edge ..
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Its somewhat misleading looking at the samples at that (larger-than-life) size, and the Side-2 sample is very misleading because there's no edge shown, giving the illusion of a lot of white space .. effects my perception of the composition ..
- myobie0
solid gold...
larger size:
smaller size (same thing):
i understand about the edges, i put them on a black matte...
i'll tell you what i really want to do: a vertical card with a paragraph describing what i do on it...
i will work on that vertical card after i eat some pasta...i gotta cook...
thanx for the feedback so far, you guys are making me hate designing my own trash less
- Solid0
Nice ;)
I still think you need some space between the mark and the 'MYOBIE' text on Side-1 ...
- myobie0
i'll do that, and then do the vertical one i was talking about, after i eat...
thanx for the help guys...
i think it at least looks better when matted on the black...
i might try to work in the zig zaggy lines i made, but i think that is not quite what i am going for...
u ever have a hard time designing your own trash?
- tehgee0
yup :P
try information arch in small caps?
- jpolk0
the logo's terrible. start a logo crit thread instead...
also "Side 2: already contains the domain name -- why repeat yourself unless the website domain is different? " is probably the dumbes advice i've ever read...
- myobie0
ok, logo crit
i posted the mark and the name...
i willing to part with the mark, but i would have to have a good reason...i like it pretty good...let me know what is terrible...
are they good independent of each other, that is what i feel...i feel they don't mix well, but on their own then do ok...
i am currently trying to redo everything, then get new business cards, new website up, etc...
let me know what you think, and thanx as always
- XC010
the mark looks strong to me...
I don't think the All-caps serif type is working tho. you could probably pull off an ultra modern feel by going all lowercase sans type, just spend some time kerning it to balance nicley
- myobie0
logo crit:
the bottom black ones, sorry bout the grey ones, but that is me trying to figure out what i want to do...i think i def want something thin...
let me know if this in an improvement...the old one can be seen on:
http://www.myobie.com