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- warheros2
this is for a restaurant, as you soon will find out. throw some feedback/concerns if you have any. thanks!
- vburo0
i really really like the decoration and type!!
i can't say i am very fond of the picture.. or what's on the plate.. it made me think of the sort of fluids i may produce when i have been drinking waaay too much..if you know what i mean..
- brandelec0
niiice, i really like the style
i also liked the pic until someone mentioned his bladder
- vburo0
sorry.
- Mo20
Good stuff. Only crit would be to play around with the photo... maybe blur/haze it a little. Balance it with the graphics. Looks yummy, though.
- ribit0
like the crossed forks logo-thing
I think the decoration lines need to be executed in a more elegant way though (tuning curve accelleration or something)...and the small descriptive type seems just sketched in...no style yet...maybe stretch/skewed to give a sense of movement and harmnony with the play of the curves, rather than just block text following along the curve (seems naive right now).
seems a very Detroit name for a restaurant...pseudo-foreign-luxu... or something...
- brandelec0
ah fuck janne, you made me look like an asshole lol
- warheros20
mm, yes, it is still a work in progress. i agree with the type on the second page. dont know what ill do with that yet.
yeah i need to fix the lines a bit to make them more fluid/elegant.
thanks, guys!
- duckofrubber0
Nice style.
Pay close attention to the thickness of those lines, they may fall apart in 4C process if they are too thin. Consult with your printer, because the final output of those lines will be critical to this design. Get proofs!
nato
- vburo0
;P
- vburo0
".and the small descriptive type seems just sketched in...no style yet..."
i totally disagree.. i like the roughness of it a lot!!
like they were almost handdrawn.. same with good cuisine.. all made by crafty hands not machines.
- dippy0
very nice. except for the photo -- get on Photoshop and do some sharpening, color correction (it's too dim and unexciting), and add some depth using levels.
but in general, it's great.
- vburo0
hows it coming, any changes??
- REDWOOD0
Agree with al the other comments. You should make the plate more white. Its a pitty for the white lines I know but especialy when you design for the food sector, the photo's have to look fresh. So considder about taking another colour for the white lines.
Also try to get more thin fat contrast within the lines, it shall better fit with the logo.
- warheros20
here's where im at now
- REDWOOD0
Not much changed!
Read the comments over again i think so.
- vburo0
err...i am not sure if it's better..
the thing that really bothers me most is the picture itself..
it looks a bit photoshopped and thus perhaps a lil too cheap for that place..why not show the whole atmosphere? the knives, the glass of wine etc..
must also say i like the lines in the first one better..
altho i agree on the thin/fat variation idea..
- kld0
make the photo pop, more whites with your levels, as was said before
- scarabin0
yeah, pop the whites, maybe lower the opacity on the decorative lines but leave the logo white
the lines are overpowering the product, like the food is just an afterthought
just my opinion
- kld0
check some of the food photography on my friend's site. Note the contrast and use of shallow depth of field.
- Dancer0
Agree with what the others said about the photo does need more contrast. Try and make the plate a little white and this should bring up some other colours.
Also the Positioning of the logo is really off. The lines should be a secondary graphic element after the logo, but your letting them take control of it's [the logo's] position.
Otherwise the goings good :)