Crit please!
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- save0
Maybe have the bullit points the same shape as their logo at the bottom?
dunno...
- HumanMale0
Yeah, kinda thought of that myself... just have a thing for square bullets!
Thanks for the input.
- rasko40
can you somehow incorporate the headers without relying on the black bands? I'm not sure the typography is working as well as it could - ie; the way the main header is lower case and the sub head and bulletpoints are upper.. I think if you can get rid of the top black bar and work that header better, ie; make the copy bigger but have it to the left of the starfish split over say 4 lines or whatever.. and then make the 'for indepe...' smaller and lose the black bar.. maybe just have it in black on the orange, and I probably wouldn't have the list in caps.
- de4k0
//draw a face on the starfish
- numberoneson0
Looks ok, only comments are that BLOCK CAP WHITE TYPE is a no-no for accessabilty. Might want to left align your contact details.
- rasko40
and yeah those bullets look to big... oh, and can you pull out the orange in the starfish more so its brighter.
- rabattski0
not sure about the all capital bullets. not sure if the logo should be the bullet but it wouldn't hurt if it was less dominant. find the top out of balance, might be better if there's no all cap below.
- HumanMale0
Thanks guys, appreciate that.
I'm going to play around with the CAPS and lowercase, plus the bullets and the contrast of the orange on the starfish... etc.
Cheers.
- stewart0
maybe integrate the tagline and the illustration?
because i don't like the way all the ingredients are placed upon each other that's making it boring.
- rasko40
I would much rather see no black bands, presuming you are concerned with standout of type over image I would apply a semi transparent gradient or block over part of the image where the type would appear...
I would just try to strip it down to as few elements/areas as possible, and as few differing point sizes/caps etc..
hth
- Nairn0
lower case.
upper case.
lower case.
upper case.upper case. lower case.
..is the bit i don't like.
Makes a brilliant Economist ad, mind!
- rabattski0
uhuh, try to make it less xpress like (less square oriented) and integrate it a bit more.
- sureshot0
404 :(