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- tara|gee0
sok... nothting is jumping out or anything...
mayeb make taht into letter a bit more fancy
- save0
Very bland and business looking.
Don't you think its too early to be posting stuff, when thats all you've done. How about more than one option as well!??
- tara|gee0
intro i mean
- HumanMale0
It's supposed to be business looking, they don't want it looking too modern... and as for bland, if you mean clean then yeah, it's supposed to look like that too... :-P
- vespa0
it does look quite bland.
also the leading between the contents titles and the first item of content in each section is awfully tight. text in the forward isn't very balanced (lots of paragraphs ending on single words).
- wendell0
tee hee . i think about the under script of him(the chief)-is right from a holbein wood cut or pergament from the olden days. is it 651CV that it is you are using here i can gusee that maybe. more often than not use for what it is !(the chief of me at your point now will still say" wenner takle another round!"
- HumanMale0
Point taken, thanks Vespa...
Content is due to change, I'm curious on peoples thoughts on general layout etc, and how it could be improved...
- rabattski0
for corporate not bad at all. like vespa said though it needs to be more balanced typographically. but do you have a content page with the grid instead of the foreword + content list?
- HumanMale0
is it 651CV that it is you are using here
wendell
It's 642CV actually... :-P
- soda0
make a bit better use of the negative space maybe? the areas that you have seem a bit uncomfortable. maybe it's the leading, but also the area under the Foreword (orange copy) seems a bit unbalanced.
It doesn't quite hang well...
- HumanMale0
rabattski... I don't quite understand what you mean...
- wendell0
yes ok . maybes i take the pin on it! i can say one thing for it> can you put stefen hay up to
K-line-up(LEFT) to K!? not potting at the bottom line there(STILL LEFT)???
- rabattski0
do you have a following spread? not just spread you show but one with actual content. can't really base an opinion just on the foreword and a list.
- winter0
i'd try to keep content headings down to one line and separate it from the sub-heading, otherwise hanging the text. "22" stucks up there near the title and the text feels a bit alone.
the double-spread is falling to the right creating a strange visual mass; maybe if the text starts on the left column (left page) and the photo on the 3rd it would balance. it would create a triangle that cuts the other's page rectangular block, also enhancing the contents.
and "the wider policing" and "steps" blocks have double space between them.
just my op. cheers
- vespa0
good advice winter. also the orange foreword stuff has too many words per line. optimum is 7-10 words otherwise your eye can't be arsed, which isn't the most inviting way to start.
- HumanMale0
yes, the light blue bar at the top with NEWS whiteout will be the same depth as the CONTENT one...
;-)
- vespa0
that white space in the middle is all wrong. right i'm gonna stop now, sorry if thats been negative. but whoever mentioned it above is right, you need to think about your negative space more
- save0
I think there needs to be a better hierarchy of text. reduce the number of point sizes used and try to have three maximum. This should hopefully pull it all together, and be easier on the eye Also watch out for widows on line endings. I realsise there's probably restrictions with colour and fonts, but if not explore alternative colour pallettes and maybe introduce a secondary font.
- HumanMale0
I know, the white space is a problem...
Thanks for the responses guys, at least you didn't completely rip the shit out of it, and the remarks are constructive – as it should be but often isn't as I have sometimes seen...
When the Jan 05 issue is sorted, i'll post a few spreads from that for ya'll to gawp at...
Cheers.