Critique my short Flick
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- blackspade0
sorry cant DL that much at work, but i like that flash on your site :)
- contribute0
Yes, 25mb is quite large, but your website is quite nice.
- mrdobolina0
I watched it, liked it. Id recommend more saturated colors but that is just a preference.
- justarobot0
Thanks, I realize 25mbs is a gnarly download so thanks to those who watched it.
Mr. Dobalina - Mr. Bob Dobalina - I actually intentionally desaturated it in an attempt at stylization. So thanks for noticing.
- Mick0
Not bad. I'm no expert in film critiquing but generally I think there needs to be a little more emphasis put on people expressions. There's lots of emotions running around - an occasional "look in her eye" before she pulls the trigger, and "smirk on her face" when she arrives at her friends place. Maybe through some closer closeups, etc.
The music could perhaps pause a little more and change beat after she gets shot.
Like I said - I'm no expert. Excellent job - way outta my league :)
- kbags0
Bravo!
- pr20
Nice but... Following people with the camera is step 1 of filmmaking.
Next step is showing only the clips that advance the story.
- contribute0
To be honest, I think it's very remeniscent of WDDG's animorph. I like all the cutting a lot, but not so fond of the reverse motion. I think it would work better if it were to jump back without showing the progression, and then just start from there foreward again. I noticed a few spots where the film was slowed down a bit. I think this takes away from the pace of the film. The colors I think are absolutely beautiful. I wish it were longer. Very nice work, I'd be interested to anything else you do with video. I did a trailer for the movie Pi a few years back (assignment for class) if you're interested in seeing it. I probably did exactly what I just told you not to do, but hey, just being honest. I would do this whole thing differently now if I could. Anyway, here's the link: http://www.patrickphegley.com/si… obviously the 19mb file is gonna be the best if you have the time to download it. Thanx for sharing your work, very nice!
- justarobot0
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Nice trailer, the cuts flow nicely with the music and I like the subtle time remapping of backwards/forwards motion. As for my flick, it's my first real attempt at a purely video project but the critcism I've got has been nothing but inspiring. I'm not familiar with WDDG Animorph, anyone have a link to it?
- contribute0
Watch the 40mb one if you have speed. As for your work, I'm amazed that that's your first attempt, really very nice.