Portfolio crit
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- monospaced0
Have someone proofread your English.
- monospaced0
Also, don't invite them to a website that doesn't really exist, and lay off the exclamation marks. Is the orange rabbit your logo? I don't get it.
- at least put your logo and phone on the website, coming soon is not good....vaxorcist
- bjladams0
it feels very crowded- both with the text and the images.
- bjladams0
& honestly, the upside-down rabbit looks like an angry yelling goldfish on the back cover...
- vaxorcist0
Interesting work.
Note that it looks very fun, sunny, brazillian.... colorful, entertaining, the typography is good considering how much of it there is....
Note that some people can't get beyond seeing type in another language, and/or some people consider type in another language to always look great.....
I'd spend some time checking out Dublin Design Company websites, make your own a bit like them, but not so much you lose your individual style.... just so that they can figure you out and be comfortable enough to hire you....
- the Rabbit may not play well with some, but it is noticeable....i'd be careful who I showed it to....vaxorcist
- marianaspag0
Hi Monospaced, website will be working by the time I send the material. About the rebit, it is an icon I am using in all the material, like a mascot. U think its too out of place? Ill check on the exclamation marks, too many...
Hey bjladams, I'll work on the content to make it less crowded. And check on the upside down fish too...
- Your grammar and punctuation need a lot of help too.monospaced
- Sorry, I meant "rabbit".marianaspag
- vaxorcist0
I'd also try to simplify it a bit..... the work itself seems stronger than the orange type at the top, which seems to distract from your actual portfolio...
- mekk0
looks good. i would leave the "soloutions", it sounds too much like b2b -shit
- yeah, I don't really like solutions, but if I put just graphic designer it sounds so naked.marianaspag
- monospaced0
Using the rabbit to state "Graphic Design Solutions" is giving mixed messages. It is far from the ideal way to speak about YOU. It says you're a cartoon, basically, not a problem solver.
- marianaspag0
Would you drop the rabbit? I could work with types only, I supose... more neutral.
- dobre0
For me, the cover makes me think u present urself more of an artist (illustrator) then a designer. Anyway good luck!
- tasty0
The solution here is a talking rabbit. yes?
- doesnotexist0
i'd show one thing at a time, would give each piece the attention it deserves.
imo resorting to using characters to guide people through your portfolio isn't the greatest solution. let the work speak for itself!
my 2ยข
- dobre0
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Thats a good advice. And since u do a lot of editorial, u want to check on ur grids & fonts & the use of punctuations. That quotation mark should bracket a quote no?
- ahli0
I like the bunny!
- marianaspag0
Loads of responses! It was nice to hear from you!
So far I will get someone to proofread the english, "fire" the rabbit, drop "solutions" from the cover and rearrange the layout a bit so it breathes and the information comes more paced.
And put a contact on the website. :)
Thank you all!
- raf0
Is the number local? If so, start with 089-448... not 08-9448...
Check out http://creativeireland.com - I got one of my best jobs ever by posting my profile there. There are jobs postings and a forum there as well.