Business Card Crit
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- blacklight0
just a small point, but i'd elaborate the address too. i'm sad and quite like guessing postcodes, but i'm not sure your potential clients will feel the same.
- Scotch_Roman0
You still need to open your tracking. I'd set it to about 50 points. That might sound crazy, but believe me it will help. Print it out and see how it looks on paper.
I don't think you need the ruled lines. When it comes to rules, I think they are extremely overused these days and cliche nouveau Swiss/German. They often become a crutch, and a good typographer can do without them.
I don't think you need m: e: w: either. It's obvious what each line is for.
I still strongly recommend revisiting your monogram. I think it could be very nice if you used a clear foil for everything, but of course increasing the size of contact info considerably since the effect will be very subtle. White on white will look nice.
- less tracking for your name than for your contact info.Scotch_Roman
- abettertomorrow0
Are the two images you posted actual size? I guess I have trouble understanding why you have a quiet, minimal composition on one side and a massive, hitting-you-over-the-head monogram on the other. Doesn't seem to fit.
- BaskerviIle0
on the info side everything is too close to the edge for me. I'd give it more space from the edge, ie increase your margins.
agree with kerning comments too.Also Phil Kiel needs more leading for the line below (Graphic Design). Those two lines in general will always look a bit uncomfortable because of the difference in word length.
A neater solution may be just to have 'Phil Kiel Design' all on one line. I don't necessarily agree with specifying that you're a graphic designer. We all think up ideas that apply to lots of different fields.
- brains0
I agree will all comments so far, but also notice how awkward "Graphic Design" looks with the current wordspacing, I'd tighten those two words up.
- doesnotexist0
make a distinction with the way you treat the type of your name, and of your title. overall the card looks uninspired and recycled from Die Neue Typographie. the initial letters to the right of your info is somewhat akin to calling your card-getters stupid. they should be able to figure what a phone number, an email, and so on.
- Dancer0
You got anymore of that Poolish
- noRBG0
Someone just showed me your work the other day. Ace stuff.
- horton0
not sure if anyone has mentioned yet but your logo and info is uncomfortably close to the trim edge. probably ok and within the printer's safe-zone", but considering the minimal card design if the trim was off 1/16" your card is gonna look obviously unbalanced.
i would give yourself a 1/4 inch from trim, very least 3/8.
- pshhhhhmonospaced
- pshhh? specially that rule on the bottom edge... yer fcked if trim is even slightly off mark or crooked.horton
- ok a trim 1/16 off mark is bad news but even 1/32 would throw this design off.horton
- GetRefresh0
Lose the red rules, imho.
- yes red rules are not worth the extra spot ink, and/or a disaster if your planning to print CMYKhorton
- ukit0
Once you get past any critiques on implementation, I'm not sure what this design really does for you.
It's not bad, just boilerplate Swiss modernist style that everyone has seen a million times, nothing really fresh or original about it. I'm assuming since you are starting your career you want something that will catch people's attention, this isn't it.
- yepmonospaced
- + i own 80% of that swiss style so stop rip me off. lol.akrokdesign
- philkiel0
I can understand what your saying, but I enjoy creating simple, clean, quite corporate design,
this doesnt have to be boring, but I dont want to create a card that isnt me, because people will realise that straight away,
- I didn't say it couldn't be clean or minimal...just needs a twist of some kind.ukit
- philkiel0
I get you :)
thanks
- Amicus0
I think this would look much nicer in landscape
- NONEIS0
Capitalize the m, e, and the w – those characters will help define and support your grid and produce something closer to visual symmetry for that portion of the hierarchy.
- akrokdesign0
either add the pk thing on the front. but smaller, not so BAM.