video crit
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- M0NEYCIDE
A short video I made will be on youtube for a limited time and I want some feedback from you folks because you're all better than me at this shit. Anything about the audio mix, visuals and whatever. It's a bit roughish so I'll be making lots of improvments and changes so let me know anything. And yeah youtube sucks for quality but it actually suits the style in a way.
- version30
horrible footage/story
the jump cuts, effects, and sound overall were all very engaging
i wish the footage was that of a violent crime or the cleanup thereafter
- M0NEYCIDE0
i like enganging thanks. but ya there's not much to it really just hanging out in his place. maybe he should sit down at the end and blow his head off in front of the tv? so many ideas.
- digilee0
although the feel was good the story had my fingers hovering over 'apple W' after about 1 min. 1 minute 10 seconds was all I could stand.
I am impatient.
- rfc0
too long
story?
i just lost 1 minute and 16 seconds of my life.
maybe add a story or some content, soon you'll be chris cunningham
- M0NEYCIDE0
alright so obviously pacing or timing or like actual something happening is a problem. skip through everything and at 3.28 he disappears so that's like the big thing i guess. non of it was planned it was just a experiment in shooting in the apartment with a character so a lot of it is just stuff i'm doing for fun, anything's possible in a way. ultimatly it's just about the tv glitchyness and a few stupid audio/visual gags. maybe i got to figure out a way to make it faster and livelyer ? maybe i got to make it 2 minutes shorter.
- rfc0
Yea i think you are using 5 minutes to convey a story that could be done in 1 minute and that makes is hard to follow, maybe add an element that would bring cohesion to the story, even if it's as simple as a common objects amongst the footage, and defiantly shorten it if that's the story.
- M0NEYCIDE0
there's no story let me put it that way. it's a character for sure and stuff is happening it just needs to happen quick i guess.
- bolus0
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- digilee0
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(Jul 1 07, 23:19)
- chossy0
it's fine moneycide, people are right aout the lack of story really and lots of time spent on some shots, but great start man look forward to seeing more stuff.
- inhaler0
aye,
I guess my questions are the following, which would maybe lead you to make some decisions later on,
Why do you have this pseudo surveillance view?
Is it important that we feel that we are watching a tv screen of a recording of a man, scratching his nuts or whatever? (I guess Im just pointing out that the language of the video is that it was an archive of some thing recorded (static, the play on the top right, the monitor shape etc etc etc)
I also would have tried cutting some extreme closer to wider.
- maximillion_0
reminds me a bit of this
- chossy0
that tea video is awful.
- M0NEYCIDE0
cheers thanks for the input! reminds me a lot of that tea video. the point of the tv stufff was that he sits down at the end in front of the tv and turns it off, like 'day off', brings it all together thematically. just something we did because the tv makes crazy swirly noise. i think of it like one of those tv quickies from mtv or much with a big booming tv box and some guy. i think quicker and more moving of the image or something. gotta keep the kiddies droooling. i'll be posting the final product for sure and lots more animations and noise coming from me.