quick crit
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- k0na_an0k0
minus the text the piece really works. good balance and eye movement.
i think there is a bit better of a font that could have been chosen that will make that piece stronger.
nicely done though.
- grunttt0
looks damn nice. hard to comment without seeing how the text will be treated.
- blastofv0
looks good – and until the rest of the typography comes in, there's not much to crit I think.
The illustration, palette, and textures are all really nice.
The lower left type looks kind of stark, but that might change once the rest is in there. Nice work.
- Momentum20
thanks guys! ya the type's been really buggin me! I'm gonna go back to the drawing board on the type treatment!
- Momentum20
can you recommend a font?
- onewhoslaps0
sans
- komkrktprod0
muy interesante.
- Momentum20
argh client just said :
"can we put the registration info and all schedule info on the flyer too"
Umm its only a 4.25.5.5 sized flyer. You want to put 2 pages worth of information!?
"ya can't we put it on the back?"
ARGHHHHH
- stewart0
Matrix Script Inline will fit your design. Not sure it fits the conservativeness of the church though.
- Dublao70
Maybe try to pull the text down below the image, and change the font. Also add in the other text so we can give a better crit.
I think it looks good, and I sympathize with the issues you face with your client.
- Mojo0
eep! the first text was better!!
- Momentum20
argh... ya should i transform back to something similar to the first one?
man i suck at type!
- Momentum20
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- _salisae_0
your font is okay .. the kerning is too tight and the stroke/drop shadow doesn't work
cheapens it .. as well as the inside drop shadow and the drop shadow on the silhouettes
some of the people look like they're floating .. bring their feet down to the base of the map/fan graphic
the silhouettes are very tired but they were overused so it's not your fault and maybe they work in this case .. but if you really want a nice piece i'd look for a different solution
the swirly part over the people is nice but i wish it tied in more with the graphic element on the bottom right somehow
you've got a lot of separate design elements ..they should be united somehow with a common graphic vernacular .. if that makes any sense to you
- _salisae_0
also .. your quote marks are too large .. they draw way too much attention
you need to look at your type closer .. i don't believe 'the' is capitalized
look at the spacing in between the letters and definitely play with some other fonts .. although i don't mind it the way you've used it on the bottom