logo crit
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- monkeyshine
last time I'm asking, I swear! If I can't nail it this time around I'm off to live in a cave with stock in matches and a swiss army knife.
Better?
- ********0
Better?
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monkeyshine
(Jun 1 06, 06:36)Never saw the first one but probably not. What's it for?
- _salisae_0
it's for a software product. Benten is a japanese name and want it to be simple, a little playful and incorporate some of the calligraphy.
monkeyshine
(May 23 06, 12:13)
_salisae_
(May 30 06, 12:45)
- ian000
i can't read it
- ian000
the "b" anf the "t" neither look like a "b" nor a "t".
- ********0
Nah, sorry don't like it. That might just be me though. It doesn't really say japanese calligraphy either. Just says trying to hard and not really pulling it off. IMO.
- ian000
i agree with skt. sorry.
- sireal0
... it looks like your off to that cave!
- monkeyshine0
bah. you guys are tough. thanks. off to my cave now.
- _salisae_0
it looks so much better. your n is the most successful. keep playing with the form and don't worry about japanese characters. the dots look forced (aside from the one counterspace dot)
- _salisae_0
this is good practice .. keep it up
- ********0
I think you need to re-do the b altogethor. Flatten the bottom of both legs on the n. Give the e more height for the dot, or lose ther dot and do something else. Maybe keep the t.
To be honest I think that whole style looks dated and inconsistent. Why not just start with a nice fresh face and maybe make one or two tweaks to give it a bit of personality. It might give you something that holds togethor better.
- monkeyshine0
thanks, salisae. I appreciate the time you've taken on this.
- ********0
go simple
- kelpie0
I have to agree with skt, in the least hatey way possible
- ********0
"logo crit
last time I'm asking, I swear!"
i really thought this thread was posted by leftwave, heh...
- era4O40
trendy.
- nocomply0
nice, but hard to read. too many "assumed" characters. i think if you make a more traditional "e" the whole thing will come together a little more.
i like your idea with the "b", but it doesn't seem quite perfect just yet. maybe the stem needs to be a little taller or something...i don't know. put more of a straight line somewhere in it.