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- mistermik
too minimal? or just plain shit?
i dont wont to use images.
- Nairn0
i take it the grey boxes are placeholders for photos?
if so.. no - i think it's lovely.
- jaylarson0
nice mistermik!
the use of images is over used these days. typography is always hot in my book!
I think you can lessen the indentation in the big colored boxes. I see you'd like to allign that body of text with the body copy, but the margin/padding on the right side, in the red especially, is too narrow.
follow?
- ********0
what's with the Build bird?
- rasko40
I think they are nice, one a side note, I cant help but think of Build everytime I see your little bird logo
- ********0
I'd like to see the tops of the paragraphs in the colored boxes start at the same y coordinate as the bold headlines on the other pages. But I'm an uptight asshole
- mistermik0
dark gray are placeholders in iviewmedia.
cheers
- mistermik0
what's with the Build bird?
designerror..................
this was pointed out to me by someone else.
didnt eralise birds were copyighted.
its our mascot. sigh. japanese company.
- mistermik0
I'd like to see the tops of the paragraphs in the colored boxes start at the same y coordinate as the bold headlines on the other pages. But I'm an uptight asshole
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oops missed that - bejesus. cheers.
- rasko40
also, the detail opposite the bird jumps about evreywhere
- rasko40
and you need a comma after 'clients' on the yellow one.
- mistermik0
cheers rasko. sorted it. cheers
- rasko40
and you have widows on the last two.
- rasko40
but I do like them a lot.
- mistermik0
have updated.
going to look into jaylarson's suggestions.
cheers folks.
- ********0
I would have moved the paragrpaphs down rather than the headlines up, but like it anyway
- mistermik0
cheers folks. lots of useful feedback.
- studderine0
its all good
- mistermik0
cheers all!
what a nice day it is here.
- mistermik0
updated - files away for colour proof.
any last thoughts.
My necks sore.
- mistermik0
arses wrong link.