quick crit
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- F_18
pure design crit. i'm working on a website for a talented writer. dark, beautiful, existential, and hopeful were the key words in the brief. i'm going to use this "look" to build out her site and visual identity.
have a go.
- TheTick0
don't like it..the name doesn't really stand out..lines are too thin on the dark background..
- MrDinky0
yes
- jevad0
^ what he said
- vavaboom0
i dont care for the font. and im sick of seeing paintdrips...what do they have to do with writing. if i see one more paint drip on something unrelated to painting i am going to vomit on my shoes
nice use of the color *black
- todelete__20
simplify.
if you're going to do lines soften the edges and make it look like a smooth brush stroke.
kill the gray text behind the white.
change the white name font so something more feminine. sans serif maybe?
nice start. keep going!
- F_180
noted on the type.
and its not paint drips - its milk. she has a column called the "milk memo" which is going to transfrom into a blog. my bad, should've noted that.
- F_180
thx kona
- quoo0
if we can't tell it's milk right away, it's a problem. maybe an old fashioned milk bottle? As others have said, the font is illegible and doesn't make much of a statement. The flowers are bothering me a little as well, they seem to be on a much smaller scale than the rest of the elements on the page. I'd try to find something from an old botanical book as well, these have too 'new' a feel to them.
- xenicon0
the bouquet looks long and pinched, slightly funereal too.
- quoo0
the bottom text is also too small to read easilly.
- xenicon0
the bouquet looks long and pinched, slightly funereal too.
- aliceblue0
Like the idea of Milk ...just milk
-if it looked like milk
- F_180
yeah, but i don't know if i wanna go the "milk bottle" route. dark and existential was my direction, so i'd like to be more abstract than literal.
- F_180
any typeface suggestions?
- quoo0
minion?
hrm, i was thinking you could treat the milk bottle like.. i dunno, an old fashioned poison bottle or something.
- F_180
poison, thats an idea.
cool.
- todelete__20
you want me to pour some milk on my body and take pics for you?
- spiralstarez0
I'm a big hater of the un-announced email app spawn.
leave the email link on the 'say hello' link and take it off the image.
I expect that to go from your splash page to a website, not to email.
- F_180
only the drips kona....only the drips.
- F_180
sorry there sprialz.