flyer crit
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- snizl
Working on a flyer for a d&b club. Let me know what you think.
- BonSeff0
i can hardly see it cause of all the camo
- NegativeSpace0
I like it. Cleam. I guess the only thing that bugs me a bit is the genade. For me the realism of the grade clashes with the more illustrated look of the rest of it. Overall though looks good.
- blackspade0
works pretty well, i dont mind the camo, designers might not like it but your audience will probably lap it up
tell me u didnt make the logo bottom right, tag fonts are my pet hate
- Goozebump0
yah im also not digging the camo, its just not gritty enough pink black blue camo, and witht he grey bg it does'nt convey any sense of msg. i like the grenade simple yet rugged it subtely catches the eye but it also draws attention away from the text which should be the focus. I dont like the color scheme or type of the text but to each its own overall not bad but yes i recommend some revisions
- snizl0
Thanks.
Gonna tweak the colors, there are kinda bright.
The previous flyers for the club were black and white and had a military theme. I wanted to stick with the military feel. I didn't do the logo in the bottom right, I feel your pain about graffiti fonts.
The club is probably turing into a monthly so I was planning on doing a different camo design each month to keep it consistent with different army related imagery on the back.
- fowler0
I like the camo, the colors, all that. The grenade seems like an after thought though.
- toe_knee0
tighten up the linespacing under the djs names and on the address details.
Its very dnb, the back is a bit plain though, maybe till the text of somefink
- aka0
Yeah, what toe_knee said. the leading between the DJ names and the text in brackets needs tightening. You then might want to increase the space between four DJs. How big is the flyer? If its not too small, maybe try reducing the over all copy size... You got heaps going on on the front of the flyer with that camo, so might look good with a bit more space on the back... jut a thought.
- version30
distress the entire tihing
- snizl0
Here's a different version with the colors changed and some typographic changes on the back:
Thanks for the feedback, keep it coming!
- Goozebump0
haaa snizl much better :-) the color i more invitng and the tilted txt makes it stand out and not get so focus on the tank very nice. I get the feel for what ure trying to do with the camo but there is no life, no texture in it. it just seems flat, lifeless,may i suggest like tear in the fabric, coming out and making overlap on the text jsut something to make it less streeful/constrained.
Though great job each revision is making better than the last.
- snizl0
Here's a "distressed" version if you will:
- aka0
yep, looking good snizl, though i probably prefer it not distressed and the origional colours.. but thats me.. :)
- slappy0
i like the last one best
- doesnotexist0
reduce your colors, add more grenades.
- Tara0
nice work, i like it
- ********0
I liked the first set of colours better. But the layout of the last one.
- pascii0
yes. forget the grenade and it's fine. try also to use different colors in printing (use cmyk fulltone) if it doesn't cost too much
- kelpie0
not sure about distressing it, always looks fake and pointless imo, the second version for sure :)
- waynepixel0
Very Good. A