Ad Advice / Crit
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- hydro74
just got done with some pieces here at work and wanted to get advice or suggestions:
- schjetne0
hi hydroman. it looks good.
- tehgee0
lovely as always.. teh only thing thast a littlewierd is the blue starburst - like the angle of that type vs teh angle of the large type behind teh people - seems a bit wierd.. its also making it seem as tho overything is shifted to the right abit.. but i likes it ;)
- clerk0
looks nice. maybe position the splash so it doesn't cover the headline?
- roper0
long time no see! i thinks it's cool. i'de remove the sticker and place the in formation at the bottom on the ad where the rest of the type is. it's just that your repeating the brand name twice - once should be enough - but if you are going to do that then at least seperate them apart a bit more. hope that makes sense and it's only subjective!!
- save0
I'd make the shadow more obvious, so the letter V is clearer.
- ********0
Nice. Maybe take the drop shadow off the starburst??
- tim5250
no comment.
- jamble0
It looks a lot like a Diesel ad.
- save0
...maybe have the starburst big behind them instead of the drop shadow you've got?
- hydro740
i've been considering that starburst. the only reason that i do like it, is because it adds a little color at the top, but it conflicts.
as far as the diesel ad, the only thing close to it is some of the bright colors, they are using straight up photography now, i don't know if you actually seen any of the new ads that are out, but thank for saying it's looks like one. that is one brand i do admire
- tenpointtwo0
I agree with jambo- it's got a diesel feel to it.
But besides that I dig it a lot.
I might clean up the trim on the flower a little bit, there's a little tiny bit of white. But I love the wooden butterfly (or it at least look wooden)How'd you make that background pattern?
- mg330
Looks really nice! More emphasis needed on that middle crotch though.
- Linchpin0
if it's for a spring line, i would amp the color up like 12 notches. no need to frame it with a dark backdrop, introduce more of what you've got going on in the center, perhaps on an open white canvas and have it organically grow.
- kbags0
wow, I love your work!
- bk_shankz0
yeah I think the background and moth colors have a bit of a creepy feel. It also looks likes its leaning to thr right with the blue sticker and text at bottom even though the elements in the middle are all centered. It looks cool!
- bk_shankz0
I like the feathers.
- Spanna0
i'd move the "star" down to the bottom somewhere and maybe lose the stringy bits coming outta the butterfly?
Really like it!
- kbags0
Yeah I agree w/ a lot of what people are saying...
Maybe offset the star w/ a different color and/or copy change to avoid redundancy?
It's definitely NOT diesel, but shares the same morbid happiness and similar luminosity.
Feathers are pimp. This piece is fun to look at again and again...
- robotron3k0
looks great! if you can soften the people into the background a bit more that would make it seem even more collage-ish. a few flower petals are also coming out from the guys heads that make it look a bit funky. but, i could also see you free up the background design with more layers-if you so inclined.
nice job.
- jakeyj0
i love relevant!
one of my alltime favorite mags.
good job on the art direction - i see nigel's been chipping in to. keep it up