biz card crit
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- Gilt0010
From a civilian point of view, it's dope. It's the kind of card I would grab, just to carry it in my wallet or have it on my desk.
- scratch0
I like the back. it's got the nice retro feel I'm sure you're going for.
now. that being said, I think the body type isn;t working to unify everything. You've got the retro thing happening, and then a bland sans serif that hasn't been tracked or kerned at all.
There's no informational hierarchy either, everything blends in together. The name gets lost amongst all of the other type. Try doing something different with it.
I like the idea of making different aspects of information different colours, but seperate them with some space or type weight.....it can become visually daunting.Last but not least. I don't think you need to beat the viewer over the head with the company logo. I don't think you need it EXACTLY the same size on the back and front. I'd try something interesting with the flowery symbol on the back (maybe repeating it?.....uhhhh.....repeatedly?) while making the logo on the front a lil smaller.
Just my opinion. I like where you're going with it though.
- zeroblade0
can you do without the black and white? ~: )
- Mick0
Agreed - nice style/colors/logo - but it feels like the front of the card just needs something to make it more interesting - some stylish typography. perhaps if the card were varnished or printed in a different way it may stand out enough. Id' also be careful with that coloured type if it's being printed CMYK
- kbags0
So I wait like, an impatient hour or so and I get no crits, beside Gilt001, who says non-GI's would buy it. Rad, right? So I buy it...
I put a few finishing touches on it and shipped its ass out to 4by6, which has the most fucking amazing automated system. I'm super-impressed and impulse buy it because I'm so, um, super-impressed.
I made a few changes, but really nothing like some of the things you hit me back with, which were alll great points. If I had only been patient...but I kinda just jammed on this notion that it was best left alone. I know it's not perfect. It's closer than I've been though, and I think that, in its own corny way, was satisfying enough. Thank you for taking the time to reply and/or read.
Peace.
PS- Dude, I'm on acid.
- kbags0
just kidding.
thans again, friends!
- Stoph0
I like the use of colour, and the type face works well...
What is it? If you don't mind me asking.