new portfolio site...
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- altamont
okay, this is my new personal portfolio site...still needs content in some places, but i will update it as i finish shit...still, this is my first attempt at a personal portfolio, and thought i'd throw it out into space and see what happens:
http://www.southcentralrain.com
hope you dig...and thanks for any commentary in advance.
.:|:.p.s. go lance!
- ********0
You've got some good stuff going on here.
The color palette overall has a consistent subdued nature, perhaps some contrast would heighten this. the tpye would be a great place to do this as its legibility needs help.
The entropy theme is working rather decently for you. Instead of just applying "rough" and "worn" surface treatments, maybe bring that treatment to the form as well (ie. the two windows could have their edges or shape distorted slightly, etc...)
The navigation is not intuitive (as you've noticed, since you felt the need to literally explain). Also the nav has no relationship to the esthetic you are working with, try and integrate more.
the alpha transitions are very jerky and not smooth overall, perhaps try scripting this or try another approach.
your type is lacking some attention: double spaces, incorrect punctuation, and legibility (also the lower case "i" is not doing anything for you, honor tradition). You need to use colors with more contrast, especially given that you are using images of type rather than crisp embedded type.
The static image in the top window is "boring" (obviously this is subjective). Perhaps something could happen here... image shift, animation, perhaps that small script type could be legibile and tell a story, anything...
The "logo" for the site is overbearing, especially being top left. I think this could be not as strong on the heirarchy overall.
There is a nice detail in the longitude/lattitude text, perhaps this could be invloved in the design in some way.
Luck.
- altamont0
thanks a lot man...that's actually a WAY better critique than i had expected...i started building this thing yesterday and of course it's a work in progress, but those suggestions are spot on...and duly noted. thanks again.
- ********0
I like the sweetlight photos of brooklyn.
and I was going to say the navigation should be more intuitive. It took me a lil time to even see the hint statement...
- Nairn0
Very nice, atmospheric site - suitably dirty and textured - all well balanced.
My only issue is with the mystery-meat pixel box navigation. i don't like it normally, and really don't think it suits the overall style of your site. I mean - especially for the photography links. it seems a bit of a cop-out.
don't get me wrong - it's a pleasant journey, and I'm suitably jealous!
- piperboytoy0
I like the look of your site, but find the navigation not integrated with the design. It just doesn't look like it's a part of your site. Like a secondary thought.
Same with the logo, it just sits on top of your interface. Doesn't do much for me.
I'd be great if you incorporate those elements more into the design.
- unfittoprint0
I think the site is quite nice. But I would do something about the navigation, is not intuitive. It should have more to do with the site's overall design...
- sexypixel0
Nice looking site. But i agree with the comments about the nav.
Also when you click the nav the first thing that shows is links???
why would you want to send a potential client to someone elses site.
but it looks nice and tight
- jevad0
nice subtle colors - nothing new about the style but that's ok...my main gripe is with the naivgation - or rather it's lack of any...I would concentrate on presenting a structured an inutitive menu that will set your site apart from all the other similar looking ones out there....
- sexypixel0
the text is a bit hard to read also
and maybe a next back button on the photos? nice photos
- gabe0
very nice indeed. i agree about the navigation. the atmosphere is there, colors/textures work well together, just tie in the nav and you're set!
flattered to be in your link list by the way
- dequinix0
Since most everyone has covered everything I thought of, I'd just like to throw in a little nit-picky thought:
I don't think it's good to have a song lyric as the window title. If clients bookmark your page, You want your company's name on the bookmark. Etc. I think you know what I'm getting at.
- altamont0
many thanks to all of you for your great comments...as i keep revising, i'll hit you all back...