Active vs Passive Voice
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- kona1
Hmmm... perhaps a slight re-write to the paragraph above. At face value over email, it may be taken very negatively by her.
Try...
"Listen bitch,..."
Wait no. Try...
"Hello (name), great work putting together the copy for the (name of project). It's coming together quite nicely!
However, I do have a thought as I'm reading things through. Is it just me or does the copy seem a bit indifferent and laid-back? I think it would do wonders if we worked together to rework a couple areas to really bring the copy to life and sound better for the client and visitor."
Obvi, that's shit what I wrote off the top of my head. I've found in my career that if an email comes across aggressive and negative your message will be completely lost. If you phrase it as "hey, great job but I think there could be some areas of improvement, can I offer suggestions" she may be more receptive. If that fails then you need to a) nicely state you disagree with it being ok. no need to say you're going on record as you'll have an email trail to send to your supervisor and b) say you can't be held accountable
Good luck canoe
- Yeah... emails are really tough regarding criticismcanoe