Graduate portfolio crit

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  • monNom0

    I'd lose the homepage and go direct to the work.

    I really liked your kaos pilot identity work, though I think you should start the page with your work to set the right tone (for those of us that don't read unless the pictures look good), then step back and go through the history or the brand.

    The wing-one series could be reorganized for better impact, the campaign at the bottom caught my attention more than the photo treatments you've lead with.

    Gloria should lead with the photo of the blurry cyclist so we all know what we're looking at.

    Also really like your cut/copy/paste series.

    Other stuff doesn't seem to be at the same caliber, I'd edit down to the above plus maybe 1 or 2 more if they've got a great story attached to them.

    Great format

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