folio copy critique
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- allysin0
I agree the point size needs to be bigger. I am squinting at the screen like an old lady. Content seems fine, but could maybe use some commas and teensie tweaks. This is probably pickier than you wanted, but just in case it is helpful:
"Refill 7 uses this website as a springboard to display and offer laser etched skateboards for skateboard collectors and investors alike." -- I would lose the second "skateboard" and just say "collectors and investors..."
With a clean layout influenced by swiss graphic design (insert comma) this flash site presents the unique work of August & Pemberton
Looking (to) refresh to their fairly static website(comma) eduk8u needed to implement a website design that offered what is ordinarily mundane content into an interesting and simple presentation.
Sydney's premier music label (comma)Jam Music(comma) spread the Christmas cheer with a flash card.