Crit My Lunch
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- d_rek0
Living the high life, I see.
- dbloc0
There's something odd and fishy about all of this. The outdated sandwich design, the lack of garnish sense (regarding the separation of work between the two pieces of meat), coupled with the big-name chip brand... and the really out-out-place onion section.
Are you really eating this?? Is this all self-initiated work? Everything seems inconsistent, even the quality of work from one sandwich to the next (the sandwich I'm mainly looking at).
How are you so out of touch that you don't know what a top piece of bread is, yet you are eating a sandwich and chips. If you're sandwiches like this, you should be on top of what is going on culture-wise. You don't have to make sandwiches all the time, or even like it. But to not even KNOW how to do it is just odd.
I just can't imagine these big clients asking you to design for them based on what I'm seeing from how you present yourself, your company, and your work.
Something just isn't connecting here.
- moniker0
You must smell like heaven.
- qoob0
It is very 90's.
- Fax_Benson0
I'd say 1950s - cartoon lunch.
That meat looks grim.
- see_thru0
Will be taking my daily walk to see the sandwich store hotty in t-minus 55 minutes...
- Fax_Benson0
You're the client and the designer, and it's STILL gone wrong. Take another look at the brief.
- Iifeinvector0
Make the Muenster bigger.
- monospaced0
Who the fuck disables right click?
- fooler0
This lunch is influenced by youth culture? You're seriously out of touch.
- non0
Onion alignement is off.
- qoob0
Your lunch is hosted on Wikipedia??
RIP!
- Miesfan0
That onion seems to be out of Cartman's ass. Incidentally, the mixture of language in the third person to first person is not consistent.
- spot130
I like the symmetry of the meat-like topping and the onion adds just a touch of much needed color although clashes with your choice of plates.
- meatball0
So thanks for sending this through. I talked this over with my wife who is very artistic and we agree that this sandwich layout is ok but feels blah. Nothing is really catching our eye. She suggested that you add more "pop". Can you turn this around by dinner time?
Thanks
- dirtydesign0
nice concept.
execution is suffering a bit.
- bjladams0
make the onion bigger