first viral crit
first viral crit
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Agreed, with Mr Mullins, it's funny overall. I like the concept a lot, but indeed there are bits of it that seem forced or predictable. For example, right at the beginning where you knock your head on the door frame; before you do so, it seems to me you're looking right at it, so my first thought was, 'Gee, I didn't see THAT coming.' And the bit when you're fiddling with the tripod upside down seemed un-natural.
I'm picking nits, though. Like I said, it's a great concept; the pacing, scenarios and actions just need to be more refined to look natural and spontaneous, without so much telegraphing.
- agreed about the head knock... couldn't change much about it after this though...janne76
- and thanks a lot for the thorough crit!!janne76
- My pleasure, I certainly didn't intend to come off as a jerk. Like I said, I really like the idea. :)Continuity