Quick Flyer Crit
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- BonSeff0
i like it. but i cant tell where it's going down
- function820
i agree, no idea where its being held
also the anime looks tacked on and in the date text (Saturday Sept 27) you should get rid of the white space in the A's, R's etc.
- heavyarms0
I think it's OK. Although when I look at it my eyes are going everywhere, up down and around the page. The anime figure seems unrelated and the image of the skater doesn't seem to be in a setting that make you think it's a contest. I think the only reason you know it's even a contest is the one word compete. There is some good design there stylistically but maybe you could refine it to have a stronger message and possibly immediatly jump out at you like boom!, contest, here, this time, be there! Maybe try a few different aproaches.
- atomica0
The type choices and layout isn't working at all imo. It's like floating pieces that don't tie into one another enough. I wanted to say the weight contrast is off, but really i just don't think their size/positioning is working..... and I agree the anime girl and pieces look very disjointed too.
- tymeframe0
ok here's the revamped version.
i'm not feeling the photo either, but it's a clients request. In fact their idea was to have the pic as the entire bg. I'm meeting them somewhere in the middle on that :)
those were some really helpful comments....thanks guys
- fate0
I personally like it, I think it's fun and slightly cheesey while just getting the point across. It's effective.
- ikbenvanrijn0
i tis decent. it works fo rme
- nick0
bt banana split AND paint drips! dude! you're winning!
(this is not a real crit)
- nick0
pt*
- tymeframe0
...and Impact goes without saying.
:)
- umhello0
since its skater theme, maybe you should do some crazy shit and have people doing tricks off the type or something. Other than that, maybe the location should be in the gradient instead of at the bottom, kind of makes the eye jump around. You might want to trade the date and the sponsers since the text would flow better.
The green works cause its a flyer. Just a thought, but what if you made the anime character smaller, or lower the opacitity.
- Jaseamus0
a little alignment might help bubba, just keep things running off each other, makes for easier reading - and quicker delivery of the message
- prodigalslacker0
uhhh... no. sorry , don't like this in the least bit. your typographic choices are wrong for a skating event. you're using a techno / dropshadow face and impact from what it looks like.. are you kidding me?
halftone anime girl is alright but could be executed much better.
simply listing the companies involved makes it seem too much like an ad for them, and not enough event promotion.
and it's a skateboarding contest and you choose the bottom right to put in a (mediocre) skating photo?
shame shame.