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- ninjasavant
I know its just a Krop page but I was wanted you epic geniuses to take a look and let me know what you think before I get all bucknutty switching my domain name over. Thanks!
- akrokdesign0
same black as mine. damn you. lol.
- awwwwkwarrrrrd . . .ninjasavant
- that's okay, i really don't like my krop page, that much anyway.akrokdesign
- ninjasavant0
Top o' the mornin bump.
- bigtrick0
Hi,
Some quick thoughts:
1. Interactive definitely needs explanatory text. I see a bunch of computer screens with no idea as to what they're supposed to be for, and no idea as to what your contribution is - I am guessing 100%, but I could be wrong. Did you design the icons, buttons and color scheme also? Did someone give you a wireframe to work off of or did you do that? What is the workflow between the different screen captures you have, or are they each from separate projects? Etc.
2. Photography. Are you going to be providing photography services, or is this more a showcase of your visual talent? If the former, you might consider leaving out everything that isn't commercially appealing - i.e. leave out the tunnel and the drinking fountain, the flowers and the other tourist photos, but keep the picture of the man on a plain background and the picture of the sunglasses, and add more like those. If, however, you're not going to be selling your photography and you just want to put up some personal work, then disregard the above (:
Can't speak for print work or identity work as I'm not as experienced in those areas.
Good luck, hope this helps a bit.
- bigtrick0
Oh also... if your main focus is on interaction design, you might consider presenting elements of your design and some of your design process as well as the completed whole. Like, for one of those hideously complex-looking IBM apps you have, it'd be nice to see iterations of button design, followed by sketches of screens, followed by the final design, or something like that.
- spookDD0
Don't use "I" so much in the writing on your site. Read some Dale Carnegie and you'll get it.
- OSFA0
'Talk about yourself in third person'
- spookDD
- spookDD0
"When I was a kid I decided that I just wanted to be clever for a living. I didn't have anything specific in mind, I just knew I liked solving puzzles and making art. I didn't know it then, but interaction design was going to be my calling.
Through a series of coincidences and minor events I graduated in 2002 with degrees in Psychology and Graphic Design. Were it not for IBM hiring me just before I finished classes I would have likely gone to culinary school."
Could be something like ...
As a child creativity came naturally. The basic problem solving skills used to piece together puzzles and scribble art began to evolve. Fueled by degrees in Design and Psychology my, passion for interaction design was ultimately realized when IBM brought me on for a multitude of projects.
- niceOSFA
- That's great, do you mind if I use it?ninjasavant
- "Nice", or "pretentious"?
I like the original version.schjetne
- ninjasavant0
You guys are the greatest. I haven't done anything like this in about 5 years. Clearly I'm rusty. Thanks so much, I plan on making a second pass tonight. One big thing I'm gonna try to do is make separate pages for each project hosted on my own server with more project detail and redo the writing. I just kinda got it all down to start and with your help I'll be refining the hell out of it.
- schjetne0
While your photography is NICE, it's not professional, and not something anyone would hire you to do based on those photographs, so I say skip that entire section.
I'll give you an account on Phiary.com if you're looking for a place to show your personal photography ;)
- Noted, thanks for the offer but honestly flickr is as much as I need.ninjasavant
- yeah flickr is pretty awesome.schjetne
- d_rek0
I agree with the comments about presenting more elements of the design - and by elements I mean give us some nice details of the work. ie: expanded or zoom views of some of the GUI and interface.
I would also like to see details or enlarged views of the icons. I think the icons and identity also need some breathing room to 'activate' them a little more. Right now the images are cropped extremely tight to the icons/logos - compositionally it detracts from their overall quality.
- I'm finding a lot of limitations so I'm gonna host details externally and optimize the teasers on the site.ninjasavant
- +1itstimefortea
- bigtrick0
@schjetne re: photography:
i disagree. while it's true that no one would hire him to just to take a picture based on those photos, if he has enough decent shots up (man on plain bg, sunglasses), i could see someone hiring him for interactive design and using him also when they realize they need photography. it makes ninjasavant look like a more complete package, yeah?
- ninjasavant0
Hey everyone, thanks again for the feedback. I heard the feedback to remove the photos enough to actually do it. As of right now I have reworded just about everything and will get to the images after I grab some frozen yogurt. If you're so inclined let me know what you think. Thanks!
krop.com/ninjasavant/
- ninjasavant0
ok, last bump. I think I got it somewhere approaching good. If the spirit moves you, let me know what you think.
- d_rek0
krop took about 15 minutes to load (seriously)...
Anyway, it finally did load.
Looking good! I think you cleaned it up nicely.
If i had one more comment I would say the deathmatch logo feels terribly out of place for a couple of reasons. Stylistically it's far removed from your other work and formally, it doesn't retain the same quality as the rest of the images.
You also might consider keeping the posters / flyers all the same height so that the browser does not need to keep adding/removing scrollbar.
- hellojeehae0
for all the identity stuff.. why are you cropping them for the thumbnail