flyer crit.
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- uncle_helv0
I think a sack of potatoes about sums it up!
- Meeklo0
can you tell a little background on the event?
- Laurent0
I like the emptyness on the top and just the guitar pick thingy.
Propose other design so we can compare maybe?
- uncle_helv0
Seriously, kerning is poor... ACOUSTIC, BACK, THIS. It is just type on a page, nothing to crit really!
- looks lifeless, not very interesting or arresting, got to motivate people to pick it up and read ituncle_helv
- any postitives?rybo
- rybo0
- I like the potato colored better :)Meeklo
- In all it's infinite shitness it looks more interesting than yours, at least they have explored with formuncle_helv
- the kerning is better on thisthumb_screws
- this one is disgusting. this is what people do with a hacked copy of PS and no skills.mg33
- tank020
adjust kerning and spacing, you are not there yet but its already better than your other works.
- chossy0
who wrote the copy get them to re write it
- DRIFTMONKEY0
I feel too much attention is given to "THIS WEEK". The date is already on there.
- I was gonna mention I felt the hierarchy felt wrong, but I think I've said enough!uncle_helv
- rybo0
I agree with adding a picture. i will get my photographer onto it, and i will re-draw the pick. and i will also work on the kerning.
thank your for your comments
- chossy0
can't wait to see your revisions in ten minutes :D
LOL I'm only joking he he.
- ukit0
On just a basic layout level, it doesn't work for me. The text, once kerned and all, will be OK, but the random potato chip floating up in the ether....I don't see how you get that to work. Keep the text and figure out something else to do with the rest of the design.
- moamoa0
better then some of your last works.. I think if you solve the kerningproblems... & the fontsize problem (6 sizes on one flyer is to much) you tried to hard to get a block as a result. the colours are nice, the potato is nice...
- moamoa0
btw. you donĀ“t need a photo on that piece
- DRIFTMONKEY0
Another suggestion would be to use this as reference, then redraw everything by hand. it would add a certain charm to it, while keeping its simplicity.
- Witt0
- Sweet collection! I want those Misifts ones.DRIFTMONKEY
- should use that as some kind of overlay texture.mg33
- make a typeface from itDancer
- pylon0
DMONKEY's suggestion is a good one. It doesn't read as Acoustic. It reads as Club. Maybe that's what you want?
- max_prophet0
typo on 'Amnesia'
and the old one says 'sacks of potatoes', but that sounds silly.
- Soler0
leading and kerning need to be perfect if you're going to do typographic and they are far from it