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• Amicus0

  That intro text is really horrendous. At the very, very least add some commas to help your readers a little.

  The work is fairly nice... although I read the 'Griz' logo as 'Ghiz'.

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  • me fial engrish? that no possible.UKV
  • Work is Great!... sorry, I'm tired and grumpy and doing a shitload of scanning at the moment.Amicus
  • i like the flow of the intro text. it feels very excited and "spur of the moment."johfiner

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