video critique
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- harlequino0
Yeah, the camera work ain't great, but it looks like you have a lot to work with, so go back and revise and refine.
I sort of clicked through after the first couple minutes, cuz 1. the opening footage of people hanging around was awful, and 2. I'm not watching 12 minutes of DJs and crowds. Some things to think about:
- Does this REALLY need to be 12 minutes? Honestly, how about 3 minutes? You'd have TONS of interesting cuts and sequences to build from all this footage if you aim for a short length.
-The opening graphics are so cute and fun, to cut to what honestly reads as 'dirty hippies in the park' at the beginning is a huge downer. Why not cut to a barage of stage footage. THAT says festival or at least FUN to me.
-You need to find a story. A narrative, a flow, something. That's the big challenge of editing b-roll or 'found' footage rather than a scripted narrative. Build some drama. Tension/resolution. This feels random and wandering. Nothing to grab onto.Tip: Read "In the Blink of an Eye," by Walter Murch. You can do it in a hour or two. Understand storytelling as an editor, not just a Final Cut jockey. Don't mean to sound harsh, but that's the craft, mang.
Good luck! There is something in here, you just got to dig deeper.