Please Crit.
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- detritus0
Fair enough, you don't have all the details to hand, but don't let that stop you finishing up your work. If you don't have details, make them up - it's hard for 3rd parties to crit your stuff if it's incomplete.
Your timetable needs more structure - either chronological or merely aesthetic. At the moment, it's just a bunch of words and times flung into a black box.
Fair enough, you know what the 'Flapper' is - someone from the next town along, or someone new to the city might not. You don't need full details, just something to clarify - "the Flapper, Main Street' or their web address, or .. well, anything. Never assume your audience is in full receipt of all the facts. That way loss of business lies.
What's the overall concept here, if any? I can't see anything - it's a mal-rended mish-mash of minimalism and shape, but without any feeling or heart - hence why I said it feels empty. It doesn't represent anything, nor is it appropriately minimal and well-designed enough to stand out on its own, doing nothing.
Maybe Platform Productions are well known.. but even so - what sort of music is this? Waltz? Samba? Dirty Basslicks from Sarf Landan?