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- pauliusuza
Got a weird feeling that something could be improved. Any feedback?
- Nairn0
It would've looked better had you made it on a PC.
- wha?set
- http://www.qbn.com/t…Nairn
- Whoops, totally wrong login.Nairn
- Horp0
I have feedback....
I didn't click your link. This is because I find your general demeanor to be suspect and a little bit sinister. Try a more friendly approach, provide some information to give us some perspective to work from, then we wont suspect we're about to see three tubby elderly men shagging each other in the shower when we click.
- akrokdesign0
It would've looked much better had you made it on a Amiga 500.
- pauliusuza0
Horp, sorry about that. Here's some perspective: the client is Omnitar Inc. an Artificial Intelligence startup, they have this cool new API that will become self aware and rule the planet.
I made the logo and a microsite for investors (they are looking for VC funds).
- spec?Mojo
- Ask yourself..."What would SkyNet do?"ETM
- It's like a 7 year old, can follow a line of thought, understands input, and learns darn fast...pauliusuza
- abettertomorrow0
What's up with the scribbly thing in top right? That and the background make it look like its aimed at kids or something
- it was all done in 24 hours including the back-end, so had to sacrifice the shiny style for doodles.pauliusuza
- Maybe more minimal would work though? Just drop the background graphics, will look better IMOabettertomorrow
- white bg looks good on smaller screens, not so good on larger onespauliusuza
- the scribble look does not seem appropriate for something as advanced as AI to meyeeblazer
- abettertomorrow0
I would get rid of the background scribbles and the grey 3D "edges" in the featured area.
- mrghost0
the white box around all the text is a little strange but I like it.
- pauliusuza0
thanks
- pauliusuza0
No, more like this:
- Damn, I was hoping this was some Stakka and Skynet...dMullins
- utopian0
Why don't you integrate the mask into part of the "O" and simplify the mask into B/W art work, eliminating the 1999, 3D bevels and drop shadow effects...
- Um, tried that, but the instantaneous association on view was A instead of O.pauliusuza
- utopian0
what kind of mask is that?
- Theatre mask. The one actor has to hold during the performancepauliusuza
- duckseason0
Feel the logo and site design clash a bit.
The BG and the illustration in the upper right are what's causing it - they look more targeted to Nickelodeon than investors for a startup AI biz.- would changing the doodle with similar hitech / 3d render / glossy stuff work?pauliusuza
- desmo0
The background pattern feels distracting and the way you have your body copy blocked out may get irritating after a while.
- sorry, what do you mean by "body copy blocked out "pauliusuza
- kona0
not bad but a couple of things...
- the mask in the logo to me diminishes the product and just isn't working. i'd remove the mask if you can and think of another object to put in it's place
- focus on your grid by removing the two gray boxes flanking the hero, increase the size of the hero to the full width of the content below, then, put that content into a while container and give the content a nice margin. as it stands the content looks odd just floating around like that. it needs to be grounded
- also. i'd work on the i.a. you basically have 6 sections all competing against each other. try and break it down into 3 main secondary sections, then 3 sub-sections with strong ctas (Availability? / Learn more / Investors) with a small blurb for each, nothing more than a sentence or two. They need to be instantly digestible right.
- i like the hand drawn art, maybe incorporate some of that by sprinkling more as icons for the 3 main sections (What is Omnitar? / Who's it for? / How much).
keep pushing. nice start dude.
- pauliusuza0
About the mask: when launched Omnitar will also provide 3D avatars (on top of the AI engine) so while the mask does not make much sense now it sort of fits the later stage of the company.
- but if anyone has a suggestion of another object instead, now is the timepauliusuza
- dbloc0
with the face logo and the cartoony type style is doesn't say smarter to me...
- wordssssss0
don't do handwritten if you can't do handwritten